Talk:Trogloraptor/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 05:30, 2 September 2012 (UTC)

I propose to review this and will start in the next couple of days. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:30, 2 September 2012 (UTC)


 * Will be dealing with whatever issues you can find. Cheers for the review.-- O BSIDIAN  †  S OUL  07:14, 2 September 2012 (UTC)

First reading
I have just read through the article and find the prose quality high. A few points I noticed:
 * The second paragraph of the Discovery section overuses the word "discovery".
 * "However, Trogloraptor exhibits several unique features, like primitive respiratory systems, that justify their separation to a different family." - This sentence is partly in the singular and partly plural.
 * "... their habitat and hooked raptorial tarsi." - This uses the word "their" but does not make cleat to what it is referring.
 * "... series of light-colored faint chevron markings." - I think the word "faint" should precede "light-colored".
 * "They spin primitive webs with only a few strands, from which they hang from the roof of caves." - Do only the males spin webs?

No more time now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:50, 2 September 2012 (UTC)


 * ✅ I think. I've moved the "primitive webs" sentence to the ecology subsection. -- O BSIDIAN  †  S OUL  07:35, 3 September 2012 (UTC)