Talk:Troika laundromat

Lead section has extra information
I added a clean-up tag that the lead section has extra information that is not included in the body of the article. The lead should introduce and summarize an article, not tease the reader with a few tidbits of information that are not disclosed in more details in the body of the article. That is not encyclopedic writing. See MOS:LEAD for more details about the purpose of the lead section. What I mean is that if you took away the lead section would the article still make complete sense? If it doesn't, then it is a sure sign that the lead section has been written news style commonly found in newspapers rather than being in Wikipedia's summary style. My biggest issue is with the word "laundromat", its used in the article title, once in the lead, three times in the article and in ten of the sources, without once defining what a laundromat is or how it works, in the body of the article. Also, what distinguishes this article from the Russian Laundromat, the Azerbaijani laundromat and other money laundering schemes or money-go-rounds? - Cameron Dewe (talk) 22:18, 30 September 2023 (UTC)


 * @Aredoros87: Thank you for updating the lead so promptly. However, please review my comments above. I think the article is fundamentally flawed because it starts with the discovery of the scheme, and does not explain how it was set up initially, first. If you are going to write this article that way then this article should be called the "Troika laundromat investigation", which it is not. You need to start at the beginning and explain the crime before investigating it. This is hard, because the investigation and the newspapers report what they have discovered first, so it is a bit like looking backwards through the wrong end of the telescope and expecting to see the stars in your eyes. - Cameron Dewe (talk) 22:40, 30 September 2023 (UTC)
 * Actually I wasn't aware of the first comment. I will take a look and do the necessary steps. Thanks for the guidance. Aredoros87 (talk) 10:48, 1 October 2023 (UTC)
 * @Cameron Dewe, I added a sentence that notes how much money and in which period the money was transferred. Can we delete the tag now? Aredoros87 (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2023 (UTC)