Talk:Tropical Storm Arlene (2011)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

This article is in good shape. However, my concerns are:
 * Better opener. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "Originating from an Atlantic tropical wave, the precursor disturbance crossed the Yucatán Peninsula before emerging into the Bay of Campeche over warm waters." delink Atlatnic, major term per WP:OVERLINKING. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "and on June 30 Arlene " comma before "Arlene". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 04:48, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Why is there a source in the lead? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 17:00, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * The MH is really good; however, it needs to be updated via TCR. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * " Throughout the country, Arlene resulted in 22 confirmed fatalities and left one person missing." source? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "[28] In the wake of Arlene, one fatality was confirmed in Chiapas due to the effects of the storm.[1]" redundancy, either the first part or the last part should be removed. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Parts of the impact could use some copyediting. For example, "They were both extended shortly after" sounds weird. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "Prior to impact, the IMSS activated a contingency plan for risk zones in the states of Veracruz and Tamaulipas." IMO "Prior to impact seems odd. In addition, spell out IMSS on it's first usage per MOS. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * "Damage from the storm surmounted Mex$67 million (US$5.8 million) in Tamaulipas.[50]" wtf, what does "Mex" mean. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Remember, I'm not the person who created the article, let alone add that. I also don't really appreciate foul language on this review, can you tone the level down a bit? The "Mex" is trying to point out Arlene's total in Mexican Currency. I'll change it. STO12 (talk) 16:49, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I know. Tell me when you have changed it. Thanks. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:58, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 16:55, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * "Swollen rivers in El Arenal and Huejutla drowned two people, who were later confirmed dead.[52] In the wake of the disaster, the government of Hidalgo allocated a total Mex$17 million (US$1.45 million) in order to initiate rehabilitation work.[53] " see above. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 16:55, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * any aftermath? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Are the links on the talk page used in the article? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Why is Stan linked in the See also? YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 16:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Swamp the 2011 AHS link with a Timeline of the 2011 Atlantic hurricane season link. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. STO12 (talk) 16:58, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

In better shape than Harvey, but still some work needed. It's close though. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  04:12, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Refs 47 and 58 use Staff Writer YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * I have fixed the issues not addressed above. Please pass/fail or reply speedily as this review has been open way longer than it should have been. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 17:34, 24 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Meh, I'm used to the days of no GAN review limits, but I am passing this article. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:34, 24 November 2012 (UTC)