Talk:Tropical Storm Beryl (1994)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " Initially a tropical depression, the system intensified into a tropical storm about 24 hours after forming. Beryl then moved slowly northeastward and peaked with maximum sustained winds of 60 mph (95 km/h) before making landfall near Panama City, Florida, early on August 16." mind breaking this rather long sentence up? YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * That is two sentences. I could shorten the second sentence a bit if you want, but there's really no point in making it three sentences--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " The next day, surface observations and ship reports suggested the presence of a weak 1,014 mbar (29.9 inHg) surface low pressure system. " why is surface observation lined at "surface" and not further up in the sentence, with "surface observations" and why is LPA overlinked? YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " while its poorly defined center of circulation was organizing." how does a center organize? "I think became more defined" would be better. YE Pacific  Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Ok, but I'm not adding "I think" :P --12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " Despite weakening, the system maintained rainbands " why is rainband linked here and not above when you mention banding? YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "Along the coast of the Florida Panhandle, tides ranging from 3 to 5 feet (0.91 to 1.52 m)"why spell out units? YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "After the storm, Governor Carroll A. Campbell Jr. declared a state of emergency for Lexington County due to tornado damage and dispatched 100 South Carolina National Guard police to the area.[26]" clarify that he's no longer the governor and link state of emergency. YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "In Bradford County, the worst of the flooding occurred in the western side of the county, especially in areas adjacent to Buck and Bentley creeks" worst flooding from the storm in general or just in the county? If it's the latter, I think this sentence is fine, but should be tweaked if the former. YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * It's the latter. That was the worst flooding in Bradford County, PA--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "Tioga County received $1.5 million in damage; a woman in the town of Tioga drowned after attempted to leave her stranded vehicle. " missing subject. YE Pacific Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)

Overall, this article is well done, with just a few slight issues that need to be addressed. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  18:49, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review!--12george1 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2017 (UTC)