Talk:Tropical Storm Carlotta (2018)

June 2018
Is this really relevant enough for an article? It's merely a tropical storm, caused no deaths, and only very minor damage. Alex of Canada (talk) 19:17, 17 June 2018 (UTC)
 * In case you did not know, intensity of a tropical system has little to do with article worthyness, and it's quite premature to conclude minor damage within 24 hours after the northern eyewall lashed Acapulco. This article is most likely expandable. YE Pacific Hurricane  21:05, 17 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Two days later, nothing has happened with it still, except for some flooding. This storm will not be mentioned in any history books, this really doesn't need an article at this rate. Alex of Canada (talk) 19:26, 19 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Plenty of hurricanes that aren't mentioned in history text books get articles. If you don't believe me, look through other seasons. Someone could likely flesh out a respectable sized impact section to fill out the jobs. YE Pacific Hurricane  19:47, 19 June 2018 (UTC)

Impact
Appears Carlotta has a widespread impact according to news sources and the Mexican government. The list below is for organizational purposes (for myself and others). Please note that additional locations will be added in the future. Noah Talk 20:52, 31 March 2019 (UTC)


 * Aguascalientes ✅
 * Michoacán ✅
 * Guerrero ✅
 * Oaxaca ✅
 * Yucatán Peninsula ✅
 * Puebla ✅

A-class review

 * "On June 12, the National Hurricane Center (NHC) reported that a broad area of low pressure had formed several hundred miles south of southeastern Mexico." - We already established the ITCZ breakdown occurred south of Mexico, I don't think we need to repeat the location.
 * Changed to "the aforementioned country" to keep a location reference since this sentence mentions a distance. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * There are six sentences in a row in the lede that mention "Carlotta." Try to mix it up with the cyclone or storm or system, etc.
 * Changed a few iterations of it. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Tropical Storm Carlotta formed as the result of a breakdown in the Intertropical Convergence Zone to the south of Mexico, however, a tropical wave that crossed over Central America around June 11 may have contributed to Carlotta's formation as well." - Let's convert the comma before "however" to a semicolon, or even better, split this into two separate sentences.
 * Split. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Around that time, the NHC forecast that a mid-level ridge over Mexico would break down on the next day, leaving the depression in an area of light steering currents." - We're using "break down" a lot. Can we substitute with "weaken" or "erode"?
 * Changed to weaken. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Despite being located in an environment with low-to-moderate wind shear and sea surface temperatures exceeding 30 °C (86 °F)," - No need for the dashes in low to moderate.
 * Removed the dashes. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Soon after, Carotta's upper-level circulation decoupled entirely and was drifting towards the southwest" - "was drifting" --> "drifted"
 * Changed. Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Carlotta's remnants dissipated approximately six hours later." - The previous sentence references "soon after" so I'm not sure what 6 hours later equates to.
 * Added a specific time. Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "In the Yucatán Peninsula, Carlotta and multiple other systems dropped between 70–400 mm (3–20 in) of rain, causing severe flooding." - What other systems?
 * Mentioned them in a bit more detail based on the Mexican source. Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "The body of a 29-year-old man was recovered about 10 mi (20 km) off the coast of Oaxaca after he was dragged away by flood waters and drowned." - We don't need "of Oaxaca" since you mentioned it in the previous sentence.
 * Removed. Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "The ports of Huatulco, Puerto Ángel and Puerto Escondido were closed and fishing operations were suspended due to the proximity of Carlotta." - Comma before "and"
 * Done. Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "In the Costa Chica region, several palapas on a beach and the fishing equipment of at least 80 families was damaged," - "was" --> "were" Also, can we wikilink palapas?
 * Fishing equipment is singular, so it would be "was". Ignore the 'of at least 80 families'. Linked for Palapas. Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Additionally, a hospital reported window damage, 11 roads collapsed, nine houses lost their rooves, and 32 neighborhoods lost power in Acapulco." - The way this sentence is worded implied the hospital reported 11 roads collapsed and the rest. Also, the plural of roof is roofs.
 * Put the hospital part last. Actually, rooves is one of the plural spellings. I did change it since it seems people prefer roofs over the latter. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Approximately 210.6 mm (8.291 in) of rain fell in La Villita, while 194.9 mm (7.673 in) was recorded in Presa La Villita." - These are similar ideas so don't need the comma.
 * Removed the comma. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * "Mexican authorities alerted the public that the El Cedazo dam had the potential to overflow due to the heavy rainfall." - Did it?
 * Added that no overflow occurred. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * In general, I think we can cut down on the use of "it was reported." All of the impacts of a tropical cyclone are reported otherwise we wouldn't know. No need to explicitly state it multiple times.
 * Reduced the number of usages of "reported". <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Remove the middle initial for Pasch in the first reference or add the remaining forecasters' initials (for reference: Eric S Blake, David A. Zelinsky, John P. Cangialosi, Lixion A. Avila, Richard J. Pasch, Stacy R. Stewart).
 * Simply removed the middle initial. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 23:48, 9 May 2019 (UTC)

Looks good to me otherwise! ☁❄ϟ TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 23:23, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
 * I should have addressed everything. <span style="white-space:nowrap;text-shadow:#009200 0.3em 0.4em 1.0em,#009200 -0.2em -0.2em 1.0em;color:#009200">Noah Talk 00:50, 10 May 2019 (UTC)