Talk:Tropical Storm Cindy (1963)/GA2

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 18:36, 9 July 2014 (UTC)

Hello User:Cloudchased! I am going to be reviewing this article this afternoon. Hopefully it will eventually becoming a Good Article. The issues I have with passing the article are list below.--12george1 (talk) 18:36, 9 July 2014 (UTC)
 * "The third named storm of the 1963 Atlantic hurricane season" - Wikilink "named storm" to Tropical cyclone naming
 * "Despite favorable conditions, with high sea surface temperatures, the storm only intensified into a Category 1 hurricane; after peaking with 1-minute maximum sustained winds of 80 mph (130 km/h), it made landfall at High Island on the morning of 17 September as a slightly weaker system with an atmospheric pressure of 996 mbar (hPa; 29.41 inHg)." - I think you should just split this into two sentences at that semicolon.
 * "Cindy remained nearly stationary for nearly a day," ---> "Cindy remained nearly stationary for almost a day,"
 * "As Cindy made its gradual approach towards Galveston that evening, only slightly heightened wind speeds were observed, peaking at 80 mph (130 km/h).[1]" - According to the, Cindy reached sustained winds of 80 mph at 0000 UTC on September 17, not the evening of September 16.
 * 00z is very much within the realm of "that evening" for real-world purposes imo. –  Juliancolton  &#124; Talk 18:46, 9 July 2014 (UTC)


 * "Soon after moving ashore, Cindy became nearly stationary for 18 hours,[1] maintaining Category 1 intensity before weakening to a tropical depression;[3] the remnants of Cindy gradually turned westward-to-southwestward and decreased in strength during 18 and 19 September" - So you just skip from Category 1 to tropical depression status (you forgot to mention tropical storm status) and don't mention a date for any of those events?
 * "the remnants of Cindy gradually turned westward-to-southwestward and decreased in strength during 18 and 19 September." - This should probably just be another sentence.
 * "Cindy finally dissipated on 20 September while situated west of Corpus Christi,[3] the first hurricane to form in the Gulf of Mexico since 1960.[1]" - I know this would make two short sentences, but I suggest splitting it because neither part of this sentence has anything to do with each other, except for the fact that you are talking about Cindy. My suggestion: "Cindy finally dissipated on 20 September while situated west of Corpus Christi.[3] This was the first hurricane to form in the Gulf of Mexico since 1960.[1]"
 * "Despite a brief power outage at Lamarque, power was quickly restored after the storm." - Try to avoid using "power" twice in the same sentence. Here's what I would suggest: "Despite a brief power outage at Lamarque, electricity was quickly restored after the storm."
 * Why does only reference #3 have an accessdate?
 * Reference #1 needs a date (March 1964).
 * Think I covered all of them except for the issue to which jc replied; take a look? Cloudchased (talk) 19:54, 12 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Oops, I didn't notice you posted this at the bottom. Anyway, I am going to pass this article and list it as a Good Article. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 22:21, 12 July 2014 (UTC)