Talk:Tropical Storm Danny (2021)/GA1

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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 05:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Grabbing this review, notes will be forthcoming. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 05:19, 10 August 2023 (UTC)


 * , I believe everything is addressed now! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 11:50, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Images

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Copy-Vios

 * Nothing of note. Spot checks and Earwig are clear.

Misc

 * Page is stable
 * Author is not the main contributor, but is a major contributor

Prose

 * "briskly " WP:PUFFERY
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 04:33, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * At 06:00 UTC on the next day, the system further strengthened into a tropical storm, attaining the name Danny east-southeast of Charleston, South Carolina. awkward wording
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:22, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * anny then made landfall in Pritchards Island, north of Hilton Head, in a slightly weakened state at 23:20 UTC on the same day, with winds of 40 mph (64 km/h) and indicating that Danny weakened prior to moving inland. run-on sentence
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:30, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * and a tropical depression in 1979 more specific
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:30, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "High rainfall amounts were" reword to "heavy rainfall was"
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 04:33, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "the low" establish synonym in the sentence prior
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 11:50, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 'buoy'... buoy what?
 * Clarified! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 11:50, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Linked to Buoy. Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:22, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "low model support." clarify
 * ✅ Tails   Wx  (they/them) 11:50, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * "The warnings on the state from Danny were canceled" typo, not 100% sure what you meant here
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:22, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * along with a high risk of rip currents from Sumter to Charleston beaches idea is disconnected from the rest of the sentence
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 05:30, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * that same day, a weather station at Folly Beach recorded a wind gust of 41 mph (66 kph) as Danny moved inland wrong section
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) 04:33, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

This will be all for now, kicking it back to you. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 04:02, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * @Tails Wx Looks, good. I made some minor edits, please review when you can. At this time, I'm signing off on the GA, congrats!!!
 * 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 04:22, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 04:22, 13 August 2023 (UTC)