Talk:Tropical Storm Debby (2012)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Per your IRC request yesterday, I will be reviewing this article.
 * "The fourth tropical cyclone and named storm of the annual hurricane season, " I'd change "annual" to "2012 Atlantic" as it sounds weird the way it is IMO. YE   Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "d upwelling prevented further" say upwelling of cold water to avoid confusion. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Overall, Debby at least $210 million in losses and 10 deaths, 8 in Florida and 1 each in Alabama and South Carolina." infobox begs to differ. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed, both were wrong, actually--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "The Intertropical Convergence Zone (ITCZ) migrated northward into the southern Gulf of Mexico in mid-June. " I'd reword this to "During mid-June, the Intertropical Convergence Zone (ITCZ) made its annual migration northward into the southern Gulf of Mexico" or sometihng like that as something does not feel right in this sentence, idk why tbh. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "However, the storm began to weaken due to increasing wind shear, drier air, and upwelling, caused by Debby's slow movement.[1]" Per above, say the upwelling was of cold water and why (because it was stationary. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "onsolidated into one well-defined low-level circulation by early on June 25.[8] D" If I you were you I'd link atmospheric circulation somewhere. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Actually, this would be the right place for it. Instead, I just linked it in the first paragraph of the MH.--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Any other Preps out there? YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * "nearly 200 single–family residences" why the dash. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "on June 24.[15] resulting in widespread flash flooding.[13]" comma after 24, not period. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Make sure all units are consistently abbreviated. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Better?--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "At Cedar Key, tides reached 6.78 feet (2.07 m) mean lower low water on June 25." "mean lower low water" should be removed IMO as it makes no sense whatsoever. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * This is the definition of MLLW.--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Throughout Polk County, 115 homes were damaged, mainly as a result of tornadoes, and losses were estimated at $5 million.[24] A tornado in Hardee County felled several trees and damaged a tractor and barn." add an a before "barn". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Following the storm, then-President of the United States Barack Obama" he is still the president so "then" is not needed IMO here. In 2016, we can change it back, don't worry. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:20, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I wish it was Mitt Romney :P --12george1 (talk) 16:36, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I don't. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:47, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


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 * Note - Why was this passed with the Preparations section in such poor shape? There was much more preparation than what's said in the article. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 16:52, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * It's not in poor shape, given the author's on-wiki actions, he did not indicate that there would be more preps. I'm gonna temporarily revert the passing. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  16:57, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, I see it's been expanded. I am re-passing this thing. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  17:19, 30 March 2013 (UTC)