Talk:Tropical Storm Fay (2002)

Todo
It's pretty good so far, but there's a lot of organizational/grammar/spelling problems. For instance, declared is not spelled declaired. That's the main problem with the article. Good job overall. --Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:21, 18 July 2006 (UTC)

I know it needs more impact, but is there anything else before GAN? Juliancolton (talk) 22:01, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

The Infobox needs to be changed to match up with what's in the artircle. For example, it says peak winds were 50 mph, but the storm history says 60 mph. The dates need to match up better, as well. On September 11, Fay had dissipated into a tropical depression that continued to bring heavy rain to parts of Texas and Mexico - this is in the storm history, and doesn't make sense. It implies Fay remained a tropical storm until September 11th, but, even so, the phrase "dissipated into a tropical depression" is confusing. Did it dissipate, or did it weaken into a tropical depression? Wikilinking could be better (no need to link GoM twice). Overall grammar needs to be better, and there are several punctuation errors. The storm history could be expanded somewhat, as somethings are vague. Why was its movement so erratic? Why did it ultimately turn south into Mexico? What caused/prevented it to strength. Impact (such as rain and wind) should not be in the storm history. It'd be nice if the lede was two paragraphs. --♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:29, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

Please fix the Wikilinks. Quite a few are redirects. Also, some Mexican impact would really be nice. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:25, 31 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Also, please clean up the units. There is no need to use the dollar sign, saying "dollars", and using USD, as in $3.5 million dollars (2002 USD). Also, shouldn't "4 1/2 feet" be 4.5 feet? All in all, though, it's not a bad article. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:31, 31 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Done except for the Mexican damage which is very sparce. Juliancolton (talk) 14:39, 31 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Seek and ye shall find. There are plenty of sources from a proper Google search. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:47, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Ah, didn't think to look it up in spanish. Well, I will go through later and translate it and see what I can find. Juliancolton (talk) 14:56, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Darn, I got the translator to work, but I can't find anything in that soucre that says anything about Fay. Juliancolton (talk) 17:00, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
 * The first source mentions Fay's impact in Mexico under the heading "Provocan lluvias caos en Tamaulipas y NL". The rest of the sources also should have info on Fay. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:03, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
 * How's that? Better? Juliancolton (talk) 17:17, 31 January 2008 (UTC)

GA on hold

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Seddon69 (talk) 00:45, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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 * Seddon69 (talk) 00:45, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Seddon69 (talk) 00:45, 1 February 2008 (UTC)


 * It has 10 SH refs. i don't know how many more it really needs, but, ok. Juliancolton (talk) 01:06, 1 February 2008 (UTC)


 * Actually, I used every discussion on the storm for the refs. I don't think it's possible to have many more ;) Juliancolton (talk) 01:53, 1 February 2008 (UTC)


 * You didn't use the HPC advisories, or any TWO's. ♬♩ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 02:00, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Better? Juliancolton (talk) 14:48, 1 February 2008 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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Re-Write and Copy Edit
It looks like some parts of this article (including the lead) need a total rewrite, and others need copy edited. More info is needed as well, apparently from the GAR above. I'll get to it.TheNobleSith (talk) 03:12, 21 March 2008 (UTC)

GA review

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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Comments I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:32, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Might want to update the conversion from 2002 to 2007 dollars or just drop it entirely. 2002 is close enough in time that I'm not sure a conversion is needed.
 * Definitely some overlinking going on. No need to link September (when it is by itself), Texas (three times!), Louisiana, Mississippi, Mexico.
 * Storm history section, I'd like to see a year mentioned with the phrase "In the first few days of September..."
 * Same section, "Gradually, the trough and associated low pressure...". says pressure here, but previous sentence has low pressure systems. One or more than one?
 * Same section "During a flight later that day, ..." this sentence reads awkwardly, especially the later part. Consider rewording to make the meaning a bit more clear.
 * Shouldn't you link the first occurance of wind shear, not the third? (Storm history, second paragraph)
 * Preparations section, this is the first mention of Tropical Depression Six. Is that what was before it was named?
 * Impact section, second paragraph, the "Peak rainfall throughout the area were mostly..." something seems off with the grammar there. Shouldn't it be "Peak rainfalls" or "area was"?
 * The Bevan ref is lacking publisher information (current ref 2) Same for Franklin Discussion No. 5 (current ref 9)
 * The Franklin Discussion number 1 ref is lacking last access date (current ref 4)
 * What makes http://www.hurricanecity.com/ a reliable source?
 * Current ref 21 is lacking publisher and last access date. Might be nice if you put in a tag in the template to mention it is in Spanish also.

I have fixed some of the problems. I will correct the rest later today. TheNobleSith (talk) 15:38, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Looks good! Passing it now. Ealdgyth - Talk 21:34, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

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Would you like any additional feedback on the writing style in this article?

Sure, I always like to improve and learn.

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'''Mostly essays for school and such. I also write weather blogs on the wunderground.com .''' Is your writing style influenced by any particular WikiProject or other group on Wikipedia?

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TheNobleSith (talk) 16:31, 9 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Sure, they all count :) Wunderground.com is a great resource.  I don't see a NobleSith blog, which one is yours? - Dan Dank55 (talk) 19:24, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

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