Talk:Tropical Storm Haishen (2008)/GA1

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HI, I will be reviewing this article which is currently up for GAN. I should have the full review out shortly. Cyclonebiskit 00:15, 13 February 2009 (UTC)


 * You first say that the tropical depression which would become Haishen was tropical at first but later say it was subtropical in the lead. Which one was it? - Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * The extratropical low then raced across the Pacific Ocean and crossed the International Dateline later that day, as an extratropical low to the south of the Aleutian Islands. repetitive - Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Link terms that most people aren't familiar with like extratropical, convection, LLCC, TCFA, subtropical, and always link places Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * The lead is a tad long, one paragraph is all that is needed for this article - Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * A QuickScat pass had shown that the circulation which had previously been confined to the middle of the depression had spawned the development of a Low Level Circulation Center. the wording is a bit strange doenJason Rees (talk)
 * Despite the low level circulation center progressing rapidly into an area of increasing vertical wind shear, the JTWC now thought that tropical cyclone formation was now likely within 24 hours and issued a Tropical Cyclone Formation Alert on the system. wording is a bit strange Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Early on November 16, both the JMA and the JTWC reported that Haishen had reached its peak intensity with winds of 75 km/h (45 mph) which made it a tropical storm. It has already been stated that it was a TS - DoneJason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * The system then intensified to storm intensity late on the November 19 but had weakened into a 35-kt gale to the south of the Aleutian Islands early on November 21. When did it lose storm intensity and the winds should be in km/h (mph) - Done Jason Rees (talk) 04:43, 13 February 2009 (UTC)

There are several links missing for technical terms and wording in some places is a bit strange. I'm putting the article on hold to allow time for these issues to be addressed. Cyclonebiskit 00:39, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Ok, looks good. I'm passing the article, nice job. Cyclonebiskit 15:19, 13 February 2009 (UTC)