Talk:Tropical Storm Koni/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:59, 15 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Since the only damage total lists both currencies, you should adjust the note
 * "A subtropical ridge to the north steered Gilas westward for much of its initial stages" - disagree with using the PAGASA name here, since JMA is the official agency and they kept it as a TD
 * "persistent albeit moderate wind shear" - why the albeit?
 * You should use PAGASA's report, as far as damage and deaths
 * Any reason you didn't use this for the deaths? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:39, 23 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "heavy rainfall fell" - doesn't sound right
 * " Another person was killed in Tam Diep after they were hit by a prostrated tree" - was it male or female? If you don't know, find a way to avoid saying "they"
 * "with an additional 18 persons injured" - that math doesn't add up considering the preceding sentences

All in all pretty good! --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:59, 15 December 2013 (UTC)