Talk:Tropical Storm Odile (2008)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: YE  Tropical   Cyclone  04:21, 2 June 2011 (UTC)

Here are my comments:

Lead

 * 1) "Tropical Storm Odile was the tenth and a late season tropical storm that formed during the 2008 Pacific hurricane season." Better thesis
 * "Tropical storm Odile was a tropical storm that affected Mexico in October 2008," something like that. YE  Tropical   Cyclone  ✅
 * 1) "From thereon, the low proceeded slowly south-southwestward before dissipating on October 13. " space between "there" and "on"
 * I never knew that thereof was a word. You taught me something new! So, you do not have to fix this. YE  Tropical   Cyclone

MH

 * 1) "A tropical wave emerged off the west coast of Africa on September 23, it tracked generally westward, and merged with a separate area of low pressure over the central Atlantic on September 26." wikilink Africa, and this the wave show any signs or organization?✅
 * 2) "Emerging into the eastern Pacific, the southern end immediately showed signs of organization,[1] and impressive cloud patterns became notable." replaced "notable" with "present" and wlikilink eastern Pacific to Pacific Ocean.✅
 * 3) Cut out a few extra details in the MH.✅

Preps/Impact
That's it for this round. Good luck dressing these issues. YE  Tropical   Cyclone  04:21, 2 June 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Delink Hurricane watch per WP:OVERLINKING
 * 2) Any additional impact✅
 * Passed. Congrats. YE  Tropical   Cyclone

MH (20
Just chiming in, the MH is still pretty long. It shouldn't focus nearly as much as it currently does on the Atlantic portion. Tropical Storm Odile is only the TC that developed in the EPAC. Some genesis information is needed for context, but not 12 lines. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:32, 3 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Two sentences of info on the main leg of the wave's journey isn't excessive by any means. It's just as relevant to Odile as it would be an Atlantic TC. Juliancolton (talk) 22:06, 3 June 2011 (UTC)
 * I agree that the MH was too excessive, but I think it's a little better right now. YE  Tropical   Cyclone
 * Done removing excessive details. - HurricaneSpin    Talk to me  01:08, 6 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Can someone else review this please? - HurricaneSpin    Talk to me  04:20, 6 June 2011 (UTC)