Talk:Tropical Storm Omeka/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 01:10, 26 July 2013 (UTC)

Hi CycloneIsaac! I will be reviewing Tropical Storm Omeka. Overall, nice job on this GAN! Anyway, I have a few queries before I can pass/fail this article:
 * If Omeka became subtropical on December 18, then why does the infobox say it formed on December 16?✅
 * I don't know if this is feasible, but could you somehow add a link at least one of the seasons in the lede (i.e. 2010 Pacific hurricane season and/or 2010 Pacific typhoon season). It just looks odd not having one.✅
 * "The storm was assigned the name Omeka several hours later as it moved into the CPHC area of responsibility." - A layman probably wouldn't not what the CPHC's area of responsibility is. Add a note saying that it is from 140°W to the International Dateline. Also, it should be "CPHC's area of responsibility".✅
 * "It then began to transition into a tropical cyclone." - Wikilink tropical cyclone✅
 * "Shortly thereafter, wind shear in the region increased, causing the system to weaken." - It is hard to determine what "Shortly thereafter" means, as there is no date mentioned in the previous two sentences. I would ditch "Shortly thereafter" and replace it with "Later on December 20,..."✅
 * "and by December 18 transitioned into a subtropical cyclone." ---> "and by December 18 it transitioned into a subtropical cyclone."✅
 * "As the low moved over warmer waters," - Wikilink "warmer waters" to sea surface temperatures✅
 * "it was able to maintain an area of deep convection near its center." - Avoid using "it" or "its" twice in a sentence. Substitute one of them with "the storm", "the cyclone", etc.✅
 * "issued their first advisory on the system at 0900 UTC on December 20," - Wikilink UTC✅
 * In the meteorological history, we round both distances and wind speeds (both US and metric units) to the nearest 5th digit. There are three that need to be fixed:
 * "situated roughly 505 miles (813 km) south of Midway Island."✅
 * "with winds of 60 miles per hour (97 km/h) and a barometric"✅
 * "December 20, with winds of 40 miles per hour (64 km/h)."✅
 * "On December 21, the center of Omeka brushed Lisianski Island, with winds of 40 miles per hour (64 km/h)." - Although this is outside of the MH, it should be fixed too.✅
 * On Reference 1, change "Craig, Timothy; Houston, Samuel;" to "Timothy A. Craig, Samuel H. Houston". Also, why do you have this on reference 1: " United States National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration's National Weather Service."? The others by CPHC do not have that stuff.✅
 * On reference 14, change "James Franklin, Lixion Avila" to "James L. Franklin, Lixion A. Avila"✅
 * Nice work. I am now gonna pass this article and list it as a GA.--12george1 (talk) 02:50, 26 July 2013 (UTC)