Talk:Trouble (Leona Lewis song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 03:26, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review--sorry you've had to wait so long for one. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-5 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this! -- Khazar2 (talk) 03:26, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
On first pass, this looks pretty close to promotion--thanks again for your work on it. I did have to do a fair amount of copyediting; please doublecheck my edits to be sure I haven't inadvertently introduced any errors, and feel free to revert any tweaks you disagree with. Anything I couldn't immediately resolve is listed here:
 * "Lewis asked Tempah if should have the song" -- seems to be a missing word here
 * , added "she could"


 * "Sony Music "Trouble" a global priority, " -- seems to be a missing word here, too--"made"?
 * , added "made"


 * "it tells the story of love going bad and becoming destructive, aspects of which we can all relate to. It’s a deeply emotional and poignant song that I have a real connection to." -- this quotation appears to need citation
 * , added a reference which already existed but was missed during copy editing sessions.


 * "becoming eighth top-thirty single" -- seems to be a missing word here
 * , added "her"


 * "While filming the video, Lewis fell and injured her toe. During the scene which took place in the bedroom, Lewis fell when leaving the bed and was thought to have broken her toe" -- these two sentences appear to repeat themselves. Can the first one simply be cut? Or combined: "While filming the scene that took place in the bedroom ..."
 * , resolved. &mdash;  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk]  22:05, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for getting to these so quickly! I'll try to take another look tonight or tomorrow, but this should be ready to promote. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:31, 30 March 2013 (UTC)