Talk:Trussed Concrete Steel Company/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:22, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * Lead is a touch short, I tend to try to find at least one or two things to say from each section in there.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:12, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "was founded by" when and where?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link some of the jargon in the lead, like reinforced concrete.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "the Kahn System" system appears to not be capitalized.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "president[1] of " odd ref placement, why not at the end of the sentence.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:58, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Maybe link Michigan first time, we're not all Americans.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:58, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " one-acre" convert.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:11, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in Youngstown, Ohio at " comma after Ohio.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:22, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "million dollars" inflate.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:22, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "took place because of the" ->"took place to exploit the"?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:25, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Albert Kahn (Julius' brother)Associates in" what was the actual name??
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " Packard automobile factory plant building number 10" Our article calls it the "Packard Automotive Plant".
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "designed in 1903–05" year ranges need centuries both ends.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "its construction [7][8][9]" missing punctuation.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "< This blue print is this building >" nasty, use captions and thumbs for this.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:42, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "produced its steel " why "its"?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "industry, [12]and" no space between ref and punctuation, space after ref before text.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link patent.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * ""Kahn Daylight System." [17] " no space.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " brother Albert, " already linked.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Europe and Asia. [16] " no space.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "with the Kahn System " small s.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 19 and 20 need to be pp. and en-dash not hyphen separating the page numbers.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Further reading" all spaced hyphens should be en-dashes.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Says it was merged but text says it was bought out, I'm not sure those are the same thing.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 7 March 2021 (UTC)

That's it for now, so on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 12:29, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. Will start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:53, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:06, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ok, cool, I've made a few little tweaks, and I'm satisfied this is a good article, nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 20:27, 7 March 2021 (UTC)