Talk:Twenty Foreplay/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:58, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

This should run until Saturday at the very latest --K. Peake 18:58, 31 August 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

Infobox and lead

 * Shouldn't James Harris III and Terry Lewis be listed as two separate songwriters in the infobox?
 * "as the album's second single on" → "as the second single on"
 * Pipe 24 hours a day to 24/7 service
 * "The title is a" → "The song is a"
 * "and was unable to" → "yet was unable to"
 * "in the United States due to" → "in the US due to" per MOS:US
 * ""Twenty Roleplay" was only performed on" → "Once, the song was performed on"

Background and composition

 * "being recorded in" since this appears to be about the two songs, I would add the word both here
 * "The former was relesed" → "The former was released"
 * "in the United States as" → "in the US as" per MOS:US
 * Remove overly obvious wikilinks on guitar, drums and flute
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "noted that its" → "noted that the song's"
 * Pipe 24 hours a day to 24/7 service

Reception

 * "received positive reviews from" → "was met with positive reviews from"
 * Remove pipe on Vibe
 * Add "the staff of" for Music Week and Music & Media
 * "highly-focused adult performer."" → "highly-focused adult performer"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "felt like "genuine hits," → "feel like "genuine hits,"
 * "on the rise."" → "on the rise"."
 * "complementing that "if they" → "complementing "if they"
 * "modern rock band."" → "modern rock band"."
 * "monster they created"." → "monster they created."" since this is a full sentence quoted
 * "the Mainstream Top 40 and R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay" → "the US Mainstream Top 40 and R&B/Hip-Hop Airplay charts"
 * "where it peaked at number 27" → "peaking at number 27"
 * "In the United Kingdom," → "In the UK,"
 * "However, it fared better" → "However, the song fared better"

Music video

 * Img looks good!
 * "glamorous Hollywood life such as" → "glamorous Hollywood life, such as"
 * "and felt that she" → "and felt she"
 * "cool photography impress"." → "cool photography impress."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "in your head"." → "in your head."" per above guideline

Live performance

 * The stool is not sourced
 * "although it "isn't always" → "although not "always"

Track listings and formats

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * I would suggest using a div col here per the size

Charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; took a few days but we are there now! --K. Peake 07:25, 2 September 2023 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Thanks for your review! Alex reach me! 01:46, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
 * You still need to change to the United States on the second instance in lead. --K. Peake 17:47, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
 * done Alex reach me! 19:01, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, although I copyedited to show what the real setting for United should have been across the lead! --K. Peake 20:35, 3 September 2023 (UTC)