Talk:Twilight's Kingdom/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 12:00, 23 July 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a short description and WP:ALT text to the image.


 * Non-free use rationale looks good.


 * However, I would suggest changing the image to one of Tirek, as the article contains commentary of his appearance.


 * Remove the links to Canada and the United States.


 * "animated television series My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic" "animated television series My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic" – (WP:SEAOFBLUE)


 * "The two-part finale" "The two-part season finale"


 * "airing as an back-to-back" "airing back-to-back"
 * ✅ (by another user)


 * "who praised villain" "who praised the villain"
 * ✅ (by another user)


 * (from "Princess Twilight Sparkle") – see WP:EASTEREGG. Suggest changing it to (from "Princess Twilight Sparkle") as we can trust a reader's knowledge of scrolling down.


 * Plot section: Part one is 342 words and part two is 397 so this passes MOS:TVPLOT.
 * Remove the comma after "the edge of Ponyville".


 * "and a tail of a horse" "and tail of a horse"


 * "since humans did not exist in Friendship Is Magic" "since humans do not exist in Friendship Is Magic" – see MOS:TENSE
 * ✅ (by another user)


 * "more similarity of a bull" "more similarity to a bull"
 * ✅ (by another user)


 * "a good flow of one to the next" "a good flow from one to the next"


 * Archive sources (you can use this automatic tool).
 * ✔️: The tool didn't make any modifications as far as I can see.


 * Ping when done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:56, 23 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comments, . I have hopefully addressed them and if there are any other changes I should make, please feel free to let me know! Pamzeis (talk) 01:29, 24 July 2021 (UTC)