Talk:Typhoon Betty (1980)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SounderBruce (talk · contribs) 04:26, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Will review in the next few days.  Sounder Bruce  04:26, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * "October 27, 1980": double space and a missing comma after 1980, per MOS:YEAR.
 * Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * The lead could be split into two paragraphs, since it's rather long.
 * Sure. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "Homes" vs "houses", need to choose one or the other
 * I don't see the problem, given they have the same meaning.
 * "11v provinces"
 * That's what I get for adding non-breaking spaces last. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Who declared these provinces as a disaster area?
 * I'll add this to the body. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * "upgraded [...] into": Should it be "to"?
 * Sure, changed. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "equal to low-end Category 2 status": "equivalent to a low-end Category 2 [storm]"
 * Hurricane, since the SSHS isn't officially used in this basin. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "(PAGASA) also monitored the storm" on November 1...is "began [monitoring]" missing here?
 * Re-worded. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Hurricane Hunter "fix": could a different term be used?
 * Any time the inner core of a hurricane is penetrated, it is refereed to as a "fix", but since you asked, I'll change it. YE Pacific Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Lots of repeated use of "Betty"; some substitutions would be welcome.
 * Holy crap, I removed like three. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

 * The first two sentences could be merged together.
 * Sure. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Is it known which airports were most affected by the Philippines Airline closure?
 * No. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "along low-lying suburbs": shouldn't it be "in"?
 * "Even though" → "Although"
 * "Although" might be the most overused word in human history, but ok. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "30,000 [people left] homeless"?
 * Sure. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Inflation adjustments are needed for the figures listed in this section. Would prefer the local currency being used as well.
 * In general, most members of the wikiproject have been opposed to including inflation. Although I don't exactly agree, I generally haven't been including them for six years (except for certain templates). YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific  <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Who provided the C-47 plane and relief goods?
 * Idk. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Who declared these provinces as a disaster area?
 * Added. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * 11 and 113 are better rendered as numerals, per WP:NUMNOTES.
 * But then I'm starting a sentence with a number. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)