Talk:Typhoon Eli/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

I can take this one on. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

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That's all from me. The article otherwise meets GA criteria. Feel free to discuss any of these. Nice work! Eddie891 Talk Work 12:17, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "known in the Philippines as Typhoon Konsing" suggest mentioning in article body so you can move this out of the lede
 * It's probably best suited for the lead tbh. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "23 people were hurt" -> " 23 people were injured"? hurt can be a rather vague term
 * Sure. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * link Shrimp farming?
 * Sure. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * could link Coconut tree and Pepper tree?
 * Sure. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Suggest adding a year to the first paragraph in the body to give the reader something to anchor on
 * I mean the year is in the title but sure. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "Following the recurvature of Typhoon Deanna on July 2" What was Typhoon Deanna? Perhaps one more sentence of introductory set-up would be apt?
 * Added a link. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * link Monsoon trough?
 * ✅. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * is there a link for 'ridging'?
 * Added. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "with both the JTWC and JMA also analyzing a peak intensity" suggest removing 'both' because you then go on to talk about how they differ
 * Good call. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * " improved drought conditions" -> "alleviated drought conditions"?
 * Good call. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * " initial reports of 25 fishermen were" -> "initial reports of 25 fishermen"
 * Re-worded anyway because I use the word "reports" and "reported" twice in a sentence. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * source #9 is available for free here
 * Replaced. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Ref #2 could use page numbers as it's a 200+ page document
 * Added. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
 * , This article is well written, referenced, illustrated, comprehensive and otherwise meets the GA criteria. I'm happy to pass. Eddie891 Talk Work 21:22, 10 May 2020 (UTC)