Talk:Typhoon Halong (2002)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "Typhoon Halong (international designation: 0207,[1] JTWC designation: 10W[2], PAGASA local name: Inday) in 2002 passed just south of Guam only one week after Typhoon Chataan struck the island and left heavy damage." I suggest removing "only" as IMO it adds no value to the sentence. 00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * That works. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * " The seventh named storm of the season, Halong developed near the same location as Chataan on July 5 near the Marshall Islands." either remove the second or third part, it's too redundant IMO. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I disagree. It's key to mention the connection with Chataan, and explain where that is. It could've developed near Philippines and also affect Guam, but the fact that it took a similar path just a week later is pretty important. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * "The storm disrupted relief efforts from Chataan, causing additional power outages but little damage." AFAIK you should put a comma before "but". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * It's not necessary, and I think it flows better without it. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * " deaths in the country." how many? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I deliberately avoided that in the lede, since it was an extended period of flooding in the country that can't be identified to one particular storm. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * "In early July, a circulation developed along the monsoon trough near Enewetak Atoll, with an associated area of convection."I suggest re-wording this to "In early July, a circulation associated with convection developed along the monsoon trough near Enewetak Atoll.". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Changed. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * " The system removed nearly stationary,[3] tracking slowly to the southwest.[2] " read this sentence out loud plz. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I did, what's wrong with it? Nearly stationary is not the same as stationary. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * How can a storm be removed? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:07, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I see... --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 21:14, 9 November 2012 (UTC)
 * "he agency classified Halong as extratropical. " already lined above, so delink. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Given how important becoming extratropical is to the lifetime of a tropical cyclone, I opted to link it a second time. Is that OK? I'd hardly call it overlinking. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Any aftermath? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * No, the storm wasn't that bad. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Yay! YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:07, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * How come no see also section? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  00:52, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Didn't feel like adding one. There weren't any compelling links to put there. We gotta get working on List of Guam typhoons though :P --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:46, 8 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Agreed on the second part! YE  Pacific   Hurricane  22:07, 8 November 2012 (UTC)