Talk:Typhoon Helen (1972)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 16:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this here and in IRC soon. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 16:42, 2 January 2012 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, andhere for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice,fiction, and lists):
 * See below for comments.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * 1) Later that day a weakened Helen emerged into the Sea of Japan. — A comma is needed after "day".
 * Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Meteorological history

 * 1) At this time, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) began monitoring the newly christened Tropical Storm Helen. — "Christened" isn't typically a word we associate with "named". It is more of a religion word.
 * Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Additionally, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration being warning on the system, assigning it the local name Paring. — This doesn't seem right..
 * Being -> began Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) The following day, Helen attained typhoon status as it acquired a more northerly track. — Can you "acquire" a more northerly track?
 * Changed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) In Shinomisaki, just west of where the center of Helen passed, a barometric pressure of 956.9 mbar (hPa; 28.26 inHg) — I think you are forgetting two words at the end (was recorded)?
 * Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) The remnants of Helen then track across southern Hokkaido before dissipating just east of the island on September 21. — track → tracked.
 * Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Impact

 * 1) Peak rainfall in Honshu and Hokkaido reached 580 mm (23 in) and 790 mm (31 in) respectively — Typically when I see this sort of sentence, there is a comma before respectively.
 * Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) According to Police in Tokyo, 140 bridges sustained damage — Police does not need to be capitalized I believe.
 * Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)

Summary
Overall, good read. I understand it, which is a good thing considering I know very little about WPAC typhoons and tracking them. Fix these minor issues and I'll pass the article. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 17:00, 2 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review TAWX! I believe I got everything. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:17, 2 January 2012 (UTC)