Talk:Typhoon Lee (1981)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 18:40, 3 May 2014 (UTC)

Reviewing in a bit. Secret account 18:40, 3 May 2014 (UTC)


 * "Philippines during December 1981" - shouldn't it be "in" December 1981?
 * I don't think it matters much. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "Following an increased in organized," - incomplete, and really with the grammar?
 * Fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "the storm moved onshore the central Philippines" - grammar
 * Fine, fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "However, the remnants of the cyclone were last noted" - tense, should be was
 * Dixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "Across the Philippines, Typhoon Lee killed 188 persons" should be "people"
 * Fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "Moreover, 56 people were injured" can be combined with "There, 82 fatalities were reported."
 * ✅. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "in the coastal town of Calapan, 5,600 dwellings received damaged" - grammar
 * Fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "On December 21, 1981, an area of convection" can convection be wikilinked?
 * ✅. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "the JMA estimated peak intensity 145 km/h (90 mph)" - missing word
 * Inserted.
 * "That afternoon, the typhoon made landfalls along the central portion of the Philippines." should be "made landfall"
 * ✅. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "However, by December 27, Lee began to feel the effects of an extratropical cyclone located to the north of Tropical Storm Lee" repetitive, fix
 * ✅. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "Later that day, a Hurricane Hunter" - caps, not a person or organization
 * It's capatalized in its wikipedia article. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "the strongest storm to affected the island since 1970." grammar
 * Fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "In the coastal region of Legaspi, home to a large volcano," - did the volcano played a factor in the storm, if not, cut the second part of the sentence as irrelevant.
 * Yes. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "in the fishing village of San Fernando on Masbate Island, 50 thatched huts were flattened.[18]" - Really?
 * Fixed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * "82 people were also killed on the island of Samar." - "also" is redundant, remove
 * Done. YE Pacific  Hurricane 16:09, 11 May 2014 (UTC)
 * No close paraphrasing concerns, all sources are reliable, images are rightly in public domain. Needs a copyedit.

Ok passing Secret account 16:12, 11 May 2014 (UTC)