Talk:Typhoon Olive (1952)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)

Not good Cy10. I gave it a copyedit, so I think we are in the right ballpark. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)
 * "This article is about the 1952 typhoon. For other storms of the same name, see Tropical Storm Olive." Remove this /me screams in speakers you just gave me . YE  Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "Typhoon Olive (international designation: 5213) was the strongest Pacific typhoon of the 1952 Pacific typhoon season." "Pacific typhoon" to "Typhoon" since typhoon's occur in other basins. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * You link to tropical cyclone twice in the same sentence. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "On the next day, the system attained tropical storm intensity, and it attained typhoon intensity on September 15." to "The next day, the system attained tropical storm intensity. Starting to rapidly intensify, Olive attained typhoon intensity on September 15." (also cut the RI bit from the next sentence). YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "Olive, remaining away from land masses, eventually attained the equivalence of Category 5 intensity on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale." to "Olive reached Category 5 intensity on the modern-day Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale on [insert stupid day it did this]." YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * When did Olive die? Did it last forever? :P YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "None Reported" to "None reported". YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "however, posthumous analysis" what is this? YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅, replaced with postseason.&mdash; CycloneIsaac – E-Mail  03:19, 24 July 2013 (UTC)
 * " Around 1800 UTC, the tropical storm, attaining typhoon intensity, acquired winds of 75 mph (120 km/h)." to " Around 1800 UTC, the tropical storm, attaining typhoon intensity, acquired winds of 75 mph (120 km/h)." to "Around 1800 UTC Olive was upgraded into typhoon, with winds of 75 mph (120 km/h)." YE Pacific  Hurricane✅
 * " On the same date, Olive, intensifying further, passed near Wake Island with maximum sustained winds of 127 mph (204 km/h)." to "Continuing to intensify, Olive passed near Wake Island, where maximum sustained winds of 127 mph (204 km/h) were recorded." YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * " Reconnaissance aircraft recorded a minimum central pressure of 945 mbar (hPa; 27.90 inHg) at the time.[1][2] " to "Around this time, Reconnaissance aircraft reported a minimum central pressure of 945 mbar (hPa; 27.90 inHg).[1][2] " YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "On September 16, Olive attained the equivalence of modern super typhoon intensity" to "On September 16, Olive attained winds of [ super typhoon intensity". YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * When did Olive attained Cat 2/3/4 intensity. Conversely, when did it weaken into a Cat 2/3/4? YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * "The effects of Olive were severe—estimates suggested that fully 85 percent of the island's structures were demolished.[5] " to "Damage was severe; it is estimated that 85$ of the island's structures were demolished due to the storm.[5] " YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * Ref 3: switch refs to Y-M-D like you do with the rest of the short, stupid article. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅, did M-D-Y instead.&mdash; CycloneIsaac – E-Mail  02:36, 24 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Ditto with Ref 7. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * Ref 6: Publisher is Loran history. YE Pacific  Hurricane 02:10, 24 July 2013 (UTC)✅
 * Done with fixes, just need to do some nbsp-ing.&mdash; CycloneIsaac – E-Mail 04:21, 24 July 2013 (UTC)