Talk:Typhoon Orchid (1991)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: KN2731 (talk · contribs) 03:28, 1 February 2019 (UTC)

Claiming, will do later today. ~ KN2731 {t · c} 03:28, 1 February 2019 (UTC)

Mostly typos and phrasing issues, will check refs later. I'll just leave this open for 2+ weeks so you have time to tackle your other GAN and reviews. ~ KN2731 {t · c} 05:58, 1 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Lead
 * Wikilink "typhoon"
 * Sure. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "weakens below typhoon intensity" - tense
 * Good call. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * MH
 * "October 1990" - time travel?!
 * lol I put mid-91 in my other GAN for a 90 storm and now I do the reverse smh. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "the depression had attained tropical storm midday on October 3." - missing a word
 * Good call.
 * "PAGASA also monitored the storm" - is "began to monitor" more appropriate?
 * I've used both in the same context before. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "estimated that Orchid attained its peak intensity of 225 km/h (140 mph)[1] and 170 km/h (105 mph).[2]" - these values are different from the infobox?
 * Fixed, good catch. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "Shortly after its peak, Orchid began to recurve near 130°E as the ridge receded eastward, allowing Orchid to move north and recurve." seems a little repetitive, maybe change "move north and recurve" to "turn to the north"
 * Yes. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "as interaction started with Typhoon Pat. Over a 42-hour period from October 10-12, Orchid took a "stair-stepped” track - moving to the north then back to the northeast due to a binary interaction with Typhoon Pat." - again repetitive, second mention of binary interaction can probably be deleted
 * Reversed. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "both the JTWC and JMA agree that Pat lost typhoon intensity" - tense, also any reason for weakening?
 * Fixed tense, but no. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Impact
 * First sentence - "Although" seems unnecessary
 * Combined with next sentence. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "its slow movement south of Japan resulted prolonged rains" - should be "resulted in"
 * Yes it should. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "A peak rainfall total occurred of 762 mm (30.0 in) near Tokyo." - "occurred" should be moved further back
 * Good call. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Are you spelling out numbers between 10 and 100? Please be consistent
 * Depends on how the rest of the sentence is. If it's say 8 did X and 29 did Y, I spell it out, but otherwise, I don't. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "Offshore Honshu, rough seas sunk the vessel Panama flag although everyone there was rescued safely and only one person was wounded." - sentence seems a bit long, maybe insert a comma before "although"
 * ✅. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "Shin-Kodaira Station was submerged underwater due to landslides, flooding 500 m (1,600 ft) of train tracks." - sounds a bit strange?
 * That's what the article said. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "In each Owase and Ayama, one landslides occurred." um
 * Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "A total of 995 homes were damaged, and 69 others were dwellings." - 995 homes and 69 dwellings were damaged?
 * Should be destroyed. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * "A 43-yearo-old women was killed because of a landslide in Fukushima Prefecture, where six people were hurt." - two typos, also "[...] woman was killed and six people were hurt by a landslide [...]" has better flow
 * Changes the meaning though. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Refs
 * Refs 19, 32, 33 - typo in newspaper name, should be Newswire
 * I knew something wasn't right when I was typing this. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)
 * Ref 22 is missing an apostrophe in the title.
 * Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)

Links to all refs (where applicable) work, though the US Navy websites (refs 1 and 7) give me a privacy error at first, you might want to change the links to the metoc.navy.mil website instead. Gonna AGF on all the Japanese and Lexis Nexis articles cos I can't read Japanese and can't access the latter. ~ KN2731 {t · c} 13:45, 1 February 2019 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review. As for the DT bit, I should point out that I think I know what I'm doing as I sort of know what kinds of errors Google Translate makes over the years despite not knowing any language outside English. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:42, 2 February 2019 (UTC)