Talk:Typhoon Skip/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 00:23, 28 April 2017 (UTC)

Hello YE! I will be reviewing this article tonight. It's not bad, but there's several things that should be fixed or addressed before I can consider listing this article as a Good Article. All in all, fairly good. Mostly just several grammatical errors. Fix or address these and I will gladly pass this article and list it as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 00:23, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "One area situated to the south of Guam gradually became better organized, and by late November 3, the system was upgraded into a tropical storm." - I think you should mention about the system becoming a TD, rather than just going straight to tropical storm status. I'd suggest something like this "One area situated to the south of Guam gradually became better organized, with the system becoming a tropical depression on November 3, before being upgraded to a tropical storm later that day."
 * More or less did this. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * " Ruby attained itsmaximum intensity of 145 km/h (90 mph)." - "itsmaximum" is two words :P
 * Nowfixed. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "then west and finally turned west-southwest before finally dissipating on November 12." - Not sure I like the use of "finally" twice in this sentence. Maybe get rid of the second one? It's not like the storm lasted an unprecedented among of time or had an unusual path
 * ✅. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "2,600 people to be evacuated from due to a landslide." > "2,600 people had to be evacuated from due to a landslide."
 * Yes, and axed "from". YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "were demolished, and tow people were confirmed to have" - tow people? :P
 * ✅. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "thirteen people drowned, all in three suburbs," - I think you meant to say "all three in the suburbs"
 * No, but re-worded. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "but the city avoid the worst impact from Skip." - avoided
 * ✅. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "Overall, 237 people were killed as a result of the typhoon" - The infobox says 227
 * Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "the storm made its closet approach to Yap, passing around 100 km (60 mi) to its south." > " the storm made its closest approach to Yap, passing around 100 km (60 mi) to the south."
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "storm warnings were posted in Samar, Leyte and much of the Visayas chain," - Comma after Leyte
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Why is Manila linked twice in the Preparations section?
 * Fixed. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "Unlike Ruby, Manila avoided the inner core of Typhoon Skip," - Looks like you're comparing Ruby with Manila, when it should be Ruby and Skip. Maybe start the sentence with "Unlike during Ruby,"?
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * "Moreover, 14 of the 16 towns in Capiz province, located on Panay Island to the southeast of Manila, were flooded" - For readability, it might be easier if the second and third commas were dashes instead
 * ✅. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review as always. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  00:41, 28 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Nice work. Pass this article now.--12george1 (talk) 00:57, 28 April 2017 (UTC)