Talk:US-Bangla Airlines Flight 211/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments That's everything I can find on a quick run through, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:41, 20 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "from Dhaka, Bangladesh to Kathmandu, Nepal that" commas after country names per MOS:GEOCOMMA.
 * Done.
 * Probably needs to note in the first sentence that it crashed "on landing".
 * Done.
 * "and the deadliest accident involving " repeats "accident" in the same sentence, any hope for replacing the second with "incident" for instance?
 * Done.
 * " pilot disorientation and a loss of situational awareness on the part of the pilots" again, pilot repeated here, could refactor to say it just once, e.g. by simply dropping the first "pilot".
 * ''I wanted to make it clear that the pilots were the ones disoriented and had lost situational awareness, so I replaced the second use with "flight crew".
 * "The flight was a regularly scheduled flight that operates ..." flight repeated unnecessarily and present tense here, it is still the same flight number operating the same schedule?
 * Changed the wording and changed to past tense
 * "high traffic " volumes of?
 * Done.
 * "2 nautical miles away" convert etc.
 * Done.
 * "right hand main wheels" right-hand would normally be hyphenated in this use.
 * Done.
 * "65 adult passengers, two children, and four crew members, for a total of 71 " per MOSNUM, spell out, or enumerate, comparable figures, so 65/2/4/71 or sixty-five/two/four/seventy-one.
 * Done.
 * "51 passengers and crew ... " avoid starting sentences with a number.
 * I haven't heard of that one.  I changed the start of the sentence to "There were..." but my old English teacher would cringe about that.
 * "20 passengers survived..." likewise.
 * Same.
 * "pilot.[12][1] " refs in numerical order.
 * Done.
 * "it over 100 times" more than.
 * Done.
 * "He had resigned from the airline before the..." any reason given?
 * It was explained later in the article in the Investigation section; there were rumors that he had had an extramarital affair with one of his trainees; that was one of the explanations of why the pilot was so out of his mind. He explained to his co-pilot that he was extremely sleep deprived as a result of the accusations.
 * "day.[10][1](p15)" numerical order.
 * Done.
 * "her head.[16][1](p15)" ditto.
 * Done.
 * "As of March 2019..." is it still the case?
 * I haven't found anything newer than that reference to confirm.
 * "22 passengers survived " avoid starting sentences with a number.
 * Done.
 * "to area hospitals" is an "area hospital" the same as a "local hospital"?
 * Done.
 * " impact.[5][1](p16)" numerical order.
 * Done.
 * " for identifying" -> "to identify".
 * Done.
 * "Dash 8-Q400" I think that's the first time you put a hyphen between the 8 and Q400.
 * Done.
 * "indefinite period of time" "of time" is unnecessary.
 * Done.
 * Any update on if the airline can fly to Kathmandu now?
 * I had done a lot of digging to see if there was any sources about that, to find if there had ever been a formal application, denial, or approval, but could never track anything down when I was working on this in May. As of today, the airline's website doesn't list Kathmandu as a destination, so I assume not.
 * " Kathmandu Post " should be in italics.
 * Done.
 * Thanks for looking at it. I've made some changes outlined above.   RecycledPixels (talk) 01:13, 21 September 2019 (UTC)
 * You're welcome, it was another interesting read. Your changes are great and I'm promoting.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:24, 21 September 2019 (UTC)