Talk:USS California (BB-44)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Move the link for main battery to first use in the first paragraph of the design section.
 * Done
 * Fix the link.
 * Ha, I knew that would be a red link and meant to create the redirect afterward, but then I spaced, obviously
 * Explain what caliber means.
 * The caliber note is there :P
 * Ah, carefully hidden in the cites. Perhaps a separate note instead? 'cause I certainly didn't think to look down there.
 * Fixed
 * Explain further the background to Kiefer's achievement.
 * Made it a bit clearer
 * the ships also stopped in Pago Pago Why "also"? No other stops listed.
 * Good point
 * Link Haiti
 * Done
 * Down to WW2, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:10, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
 * I sit with bated breath ;) Parsecboy (talk) 15:39, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
 * And how does that worm taste?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:58, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Always nice to be reminded of my mental frailty! Parsecboy (talk) 20:28, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Standard series? Perhaps spelling out the link would make it less confusing?
 * See if what I added works
 * When did she get the .50s? Provide a conversion and a link.
 * Good question - the Warship Profile on Tennessee says that she got them in c. 1935, but nothing on California - I'd assume at around the same time, but I don't know for certain.
 * First lieutenant? Was that an USN term?
 * Yeah, it's a billet, not a rank
 * Tell the reader what type of aircraft a Zero was.
 * Done
 * Link drydock
 * Done
 * Provide conversions for 40 and 20 mm
 * Done
 * California replenished ammunition "her" ammunition
 * Done
 * patrolled off the island, shelling Japanese forces on the island delete the reptitious "on the island"
 * Done
 * fired a terrific barrage? link barrage
 * Done
 * Temporary repairs were effected I know that we see this phrase a lot, but it's always struck me as sort of passive voice-y. Howzabout "made" instead?
 * Works for me
 * remained in service for Not sure I'd call being part of the mothball fleet as being in service.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:57, 3 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Good catch. Thank Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 13:18, 8 April 2019 (UTC)