Talk:USS Cincinnati (CL-6)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead and infobox;
 * She was also the third Navy ship named for "after" the city of Cincinnati
 * fixed
 * Link Ohia, Atlantic Fleet, Pacific Fleet, Mediterranean
 * Didn't link Ohio since it's already linked in Cincinnati and I've been told that would be overlinking. But I will if you want.
 * from 1928–1932 -> from 1928 to 1932
 * fixed
 * Be consistent of mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic", "South Atlantic"
 * Hopefully I caught them all and fixed.
 * A comma after "After the war"
 * fixed
 * she was quickly deemed surplus
 * fixed
 * Per WP:INFOBOXUSE, flag icons and thumbnails must be avoided in infobox.
 * Per WP:WORDPRECEDENCE, call flags are accepted.
 * Section 1;
 * to be built by Todd Dry Dock & Construction Co., Tacoma, Washington,[5] "on" 27 August 1917
 * fixed
 * and launched on 23 May 1921,[3] the cruiser was sponsored by Mrs. Charles E. Tudor; I think it is better to break this sentence
 * fixed
 * Her keel was laid on 15 May 1920, and "the ship was" launched on 23 May 1921
 * fixed
 * and "was" commissioned "on" 1 January 1924
 * fixed
 * having been designated by the Honorable John Galvin; what does this mean?
 * He designated who the sponsor would be. I can remove it if it is too confusing.
 * and commissioned 1 January 1924, Captain Charles P. Nelson in command; start this as a new sentence and as "The ship was commissioned on 1 January 1924 with Captain Charles P. Nelson in command.
 * fixed
 * Use full forms of the units on their first mention
 * fixed
 * Originally she was to mount "be mounted by" ten 6-inch (150 mm)/53 caliber guns
 * fixed
 * above-water, torpedo tube mounts for 21-inch (533 mm) torpedoes; no need of comma
 * fixed
 * Please be consistent on using the conversion template; "21-inch (533 mm)" "three inches (76 mm)"
 * Not real sure what you mean but I removed the second conversion because it had already been converted in the previous paragraph.
 * against muzzle blast and splinter damage.[4] [7] Fix the space
 * fixed
 * Section 1.1;
 * Some of these changes were save "to reduce" weight
 * fixed
 * these didn't prove "to be" reliable
 * fixed
 * Its also reported that Cincinnati mounted a pair of Army 40mm Bofors guns also; check the usage of "also", replace "mounted a" with "was mounted by a"
 * Reworded, hopefully fixed.
 * Section 2.1; all good
 * Yay
 * Section 2.2;
 * After only a "an" year in the Pacific"," Cincinnati returned to the Atlantic
 * fixed
 * A comma after "After the United States joined the war"
 * fixed
 * Fix the space; searching for German blockade runners .[6]
 * fixed
 * Fix the space; before she sank. [6]
 * fixed
 * from March 1944 until "to" July 1944
 * fixed
 * Consistency on mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic" "South Atlantic"
 * fixed
 * References needed for sections 3 & 4
 * Added proper reference.
 * Images OK, no plagiarism found
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 11:18, 17 November 2017 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)