Talk:USS John P. Jackson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:34, 26 December 2023 (UTC)

I will take a gander at this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 22:34, 26 December 2023 (UTC)

Oops, edit conflict here! I was writing my review while started this. I'll leave my comments here as well. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 22:39, 26 December 2023 (UTC)
 * That was unfortunate timing, sorry. I have left a message for you on your talk page regarding this.  I propose to let the reviewer's comments stand rather than add anything further here. Zawed (talk) 04:07, 27 December 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * Article is stable
 * Not sure File:Bard, Steamer J.P. Jackson, 1860.jpg is correctly licesned
 * I've tried to fix this
 * American Civil War is duplicated in the lede
 * Fixed
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * "she was part of a battle"?
 * Done
 * "30 September 1862" repeated year
 * Have adjusted this and also added a brief bit so that 1863 isn't entirely glossed over

Design and civilian use

 * "6 November 1861" repeated year
 * Dropped

Civil War service

 * She was ordered to sail prior to being commissioned?
 * Apparently so. My guess is that the US Navy didn't have fully updated status reports for the various vessels being fitted out and just wanted it to move when ready
 * Some swapping between DMY and MDY here
 * Ugh; I had written it in mdy but then found that it had a dmy tag from 2019 applied and I had to switch it back because of MOS:DATEVAR. Although I think MOS:DATETIES would point strongly towards mdy but I don't want to have to have that argument. The relevant sourcing for most of these ACW ships largely uses mdy.
 * Give New London her ship type
 * "She then later towed a transport," clarify that this is John P. Jackson and not P. C. Wallis
 * Done
 * "while escorted Union Army troop movements as well" doesn't make sense
 * Tense error; fixed
 * The 7 May ships should be given their types as well
 * Link draft
 * Done
 * "vicksburg batteries" capital missing
 * Fixed
 * "project strike"?
 * Should have been "projectile". Yes, I promise I'm a native English speaker
 * "to the Mississippi Sound"
 * Fixed here, in the lead, and in another part of the article
 * "suspiscious" sp
 * Fixed; I had to look up how to spell it
 * "Continuing on blockade duty"
 * Fixed
 * "she captured the prizes Cuba and Belle of Mobile" strangely worded; they aren't prizes until after they're captured
 * I've removed "prizes"
 * Give Vincennes, Calhoun, Hartford, and Genesee, and other vessels mentioned, their types
 * Link Master
 * Done
 * "during the bombardment on 16 February" date unnecessary
 * fixed