Talk:USS Kansas (BB-21)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

I'll have this done by tomorrow JAG  UAR   19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Initial comments

 * "She made trips to Europe in 1910 and 1911 and after 1912" - are the trips in 1910 and 1911 separate?
 * The lead is well written and summarises the article
 * "She had a crew of 827 officers and men, though this increased to 881 and later to 896" - when was this? Did she begin service with 827 men?
 * Yes, and this should be clarified now.
 * " On 1 July, Kansas steamed out of Norfolk to carry the remains of the Venezuelan ambassador" - remains? It didn't say what happened
 * DANFS doesn't say who the ambassador was or how he died, and I can't find any further information on him. I added "recently deceased" to the line to make it a bit clearer, though.
 * " to protect a fast HX troopship convoy" - what is HX?
 * It's a convoy designation - we have an article, HX convoys, but unfortunately it only focuses on the WWII use of the designation, so I didn't think it would be useful to link as it would probably confuse readers.
 * "Rear Admiral Charles Frederick Hughes raised his flag aboard Kansas in Philadelphia as the flagship of the 4th BatDiv"- the Kansas was a flagship at one point? This was not mentioned in the lead
 * Added a bit on this. Thanks for reviewing the article. Parsecboy (talk) 11:48, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

On hold
Just some very minor points to addressed. Once they're out of the way this will be another GA. JAG  UAR   15:49, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for addressing them! Everything looks good.  JAG  UAR   11:53, 16 June 2015 (UTC)