Talk:USS Oklahoma (BB-37)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 06:54, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

I will review this one, comments to follow in the next few days. Zawed (talk) 06:54, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Lead
 * No need for the cite (4) in the lead, as cited in article body ✅
 * Shouldn't West coast be West Coast? ✅
 * 2nd para. The word "ship" is used several times in successive sentences, perhaps vary these. ✅

Infobox Design World War I Interwar period
 * The ship's nickname and motto aren't mentioned in the text so needs to be cited here. The battle star is cited but I wonder if it is worth a mention in the appropriate section as it is not discussed at all in the article body. I added a reference for the nickname but I couldn't find one for the motto
 * Also found nothing on motto, so removed. —Ed!(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * The range information in the text is inconsistent with the infobox. I see that different speeds are used (10 kn vs 12 kn), this might explain the inconsistency.
 * Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * From the text, I make the deck armour 4.5 inches as opposed to the 5 inches recited in the infobox.
 * Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * A little uncertain on the MOS here, but shouldn't east coast be title case? If so, then this will apply to the next section as well.
 * Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * It seems as though you don't link countries, so you might want to amend the pipe link for Portland, England.
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Link New York City, San Francisco, Norfolk, Hawaii
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

'''Attack on Pearl Harbor
 * "approximately 0756": again, an MOS issue that I may be wrong on but isn't it 07:56? And 08:00 later in this section?
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

References
 * There is a little inconsistency in the presentation of print refs: some include the year and some don't.
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't La Forte be La Forte & Marcello?
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Note 56, missing the word "retrieved"
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Bibliography
 * It looks like only one of the online sources is used. And one of the remaining ones is also in the external links section
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * None of the other sources appear to be used. May be convert to a further reading section?
 * Fixed. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Other stuff
 * Tags on the images look appropriate
 * No dupe links

That's my initial review done but I have a couple of checks to still make as the dab and external link tools aren't working for at the moment. Regardless, I will check back in a few day. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:09, 4 March 2018 (UTC)
 * just a ping in case you missed this. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 20:08, 10 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Ahh thank you!! Will get to this in the weekend. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 20:20, 10 March 2018 (UTC)
 * would you mind if I helped in the GA review? Also, I did some of the things that Zawed suggested, but then where do I write that its done? Should I place a Done template after the suggestion? <b style="color:#060">L293D</b> (<b style="color:#000">☎</b> • <b style="color:#000">✎</b>) 20:18, 11 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Sure thing! And yes, just indicate after each comment what's done — so we each know what tasks are left to do. —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 21:08, 11 March 2018 (UTC)


 * Have done dab/external link checks, these are all good. Zawed (talk) 03:08, 12 March 2018 (UTC)


 * I think we've fixed everything! Thank you! —<b style="color:black">Ed!</b><b style="color:black">(talk)</b> 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Looks good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 07:28, 14 March 2018 (UTC)