Talk:USS Oneota (1864)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 18:34, 6 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Transition from the temporal clause in The ship's construction was delayed by multiple changes ordered while she was being built that reflected battle experience with earlier monitors. appears to be awkward to me. Would it be perhaps better to have "The ship's construction was delayed by multiple changes ordered while she was being built&mdash;reflecting battle experience with earlier monitors." instead?
 * OK
 * "Their" in Completion of the ship was further delayed by the low depth of the Ohio River which prevented their movement from Cincinnati in December 1864 to finish their fitting out. puzzles me. Should it read "her" instead?
 * Yes.
 * I assume the "sisters" in Oneota was placed in ordinary there after completion, together with two of her sisters. refers to Tippecanoe and Catawba - based on subsequent text. Perhaps this would be a fine place to name the ships.
 * Reworded.
 * Interesting article. Only a few prose issues outstanding.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:19, 8 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:10, 8 May 2013 (UTC)
 * You're welcome. Happy to pass the article.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:22, 8 May 2013 (UTC)