Talk:USS Tennessee (BB-43)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 11:41, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

This article is in good shape. A few comments from me: More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 11:41, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
 * in the lead, West Coats→West Coast
 * What, you mean to tell me you're not familiar with Oregon's premier coat outlet?
 * the displacement conversions don't match between the body and infobox, rounding issue?
 * Fixed
 * same with the TT conversions
 * Fixed
 * "and destroyed the turbine, and wounding two men."
 * Done
 * South Dakota links to a dab page
 * Fixed
 * "The quays to which Tennessee had to be demolished" is missing something
 * Fixed
 * "she got underway for Puget Sound" but we have just learned that she was already at Puget Sound? Perhaps some re-organisation of these couple of sentences would be of benefit?
 * Reworded for clarity
 * during the post-Pearl Harbour refit, do we know how many of the smaller calibre guns were added?
 * Ah, Cracknell has the details on this
 * doubled the crew? How did they accommodate that?
 * Friedman doesn't say - but the rebuilt ships (and the SoDaks) were notoriously cramped. I assume it was a combination of cramming berths into every available space and a healthy dose of "suck it up"
 * "On 31 May, Tennessee'"
 * Fixed
 * when were the aircraft added to the ship? They just appear during the Aleutian Islands Campaign...
 * Added a line on this - it seems it generally requires a specialized source like Cracknell to get details on aircraft
 * the heading levels are a bit of an issue, as The Gilbert and Marshall Islands appears the same size as the Battle of Tarawa. Not sure what the solution is to this, but it jars.
 * Yeah, it's not elegant, but I don't know how to fix it, short of dropping the campaign headers altogether. That's the problem when you're Tennessee and you were involved in basically every major action in the Pacific from mid-1943 onward.
 * suggest linking USMC for "as the marines"
 * Done
 * Thanks for taking on this monster of an article - it's probably only marginally less fun to review than it was to write it all ;) Parsecboy (talk) 13:32, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

That's me done, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 14:18, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
 * "marines went ashore i onto five smaller islands"
 * Done
 * "the Eniwetok campaign" seems a little overstated. They were battles, rather than campaigns, surely?
 * I dunno, the scale of WWII was so large that things are called battles that otherwise would have been campaigns (Stalingrad comes most obviously to mind) - if we wanted to get technical, a campaign is an operation composed of multiple battles strung together, and there were three islands invaded during the operation (Engebi, Eniwetok, and Parry Island). I don't feel all that strongly about it, so I'll defer to you if you think something like "operation" would be better
 * "as part of a task group that included two escort carriers and fifteen destroyers" did this task group have a designation?
 * I'm sure it did, but DANFS doesn't say (and the entries for the New Mexicos don't reveal it either)
 * "The squadron's target" isn't this a task group?
 * I was using "squadron" in the informal sense, but "group" is probably better to reduce the possibility of confusion
 * should amtracs be Amtracs as they are a proper noun?
 * The amtrac article gives both versions as acceptable - their actual proper name was Landing Vehicle Tracked
 * suggest conducting enfilading fire→applying enfilading fire
 * Yeah, I wasn't really happy with that when I wrote it
 * "opened fire on Tennesse" needs an extra e
 * You don't know how many times I did that while writing this article - apparently I didn't catch it three times
 * "Tennesse returned to the invasion beach" same
 * Fixed
 * "and 800 shells" has a spare space
 * Good catch
 * just for completeness, I suggest "One of these US destroyers"
 * Good idea
 * "before joining the bombardment force" did this TF have a numerical identifier?
 * DANFS doesn't tell us, unfortunately
 * "opened up with slow and deliberate fire"
 * Fixed
 * "This route had been dictated by her 1943 rebuild"
 * Whoops!
 * there are a couple of publication locations that could do with states, such as Windsor and Annapolis, Hornfischer needs a location.
 * I don't add states for a couple of reasons - first, you rarely if ever see them in books or sites like worldcat, and second, they don't convey any useful bibliographical information so they just end up cluttering the citation. Added the location for Horfischer.
 * all the images look ok to me on first look.
 * Thanks PM! Parsecboy (talk) 14:47, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
 * No prob. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:36, 19 April 2019 (UTC)