Talk:USS Utah (BB-31)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 21:40, 11 May 2013 (UTC)

Referencing:
 * Nofi citation seems to be broken.
 * Fixed
 * What is the purpose of Breyer and Lenihan refs?--Tomobe03 (talk) 12:02, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Lenihan was one of the memorial cites, now renamed to be clearer. Breyer is in the further reading section now.

Prose: Great article. There's really little to do to clear this review.--Tomobe03 (talk) 14:18, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
 * In While en route to Mexico, Utah was ordered to intercept the German-flagged steamer SS Ypiranga on 16 April, which was carrying arms to the Mexican dictator Victoriano Huerta., would it be better to start the sentence with "On 16 April, while en route to Mexico,..."?
 * How about: "While en route to Mexico on 16 April, Utah"?
 * Fine as well.
 * Just to make sure, the ship in The ship's arrival in Veracruz prompted the US to occupy the city;... refers to Ypiranga, right?
 * Yes, but I see how that can be unclear. Changed to "Ypiranga's arrival"
 * Would "fleet" be a more appropriate term than "warships" in ... flagship of American warships in Europe.? I have no idea if a fleet was formally organized there though.
 * DANFS doesn't state whether there was a formal organization (and that might cause some confusion between that and the Atlantic Fleet), so I'd rather not go further than the source.
 * Of course.
 * What happened with bodies of the 64 killed crew?
 * Most appear to have been trapped in the ship when it sank, but I have found several contradictory figures for the number of men who were trapped inside, so I just left it at the total casualty numbers.
 * Um, I meant to ask if their bodies were retrieved and buried elsewhere or not? The article does not say.--Tomobe03 (talk) 17:07, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Oh, no, much like Arizona, the ship is considered a war grave. This should now be clear in the article. Parsecboy (talk) 17:38, 12 May 2013 (UTC)