Talk:USS Vermont (BB-20)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:21, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

This is only the second time I have reviewed a naval ship out of all my reviews, so please forgive any newbie mistakes! I should have this complete soon. JAG UAR   17:21, 11 June 2015 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Initial comments

 * "named for the 14th state" - named after?
 * Sounds fine to me.
 * The lead summarises the article perfectly, so this meets the GA criteria
 * "As built, she was fitted with heavy military masts" - I would recommend wiki-linking this for reference. In contrast, lattice masts is linked in the same sentence
 * Linked - I had forgotten to do this one.
 * "She had a crew of 827 officers and men, though this increased to 881 and later to 896" - was this increased in World War I?
 * Conway's isn't clear, but I'd guess the standard crew actually decreased during WWI, since the 7-inch guns were removed, and space was needed for trainees. Just a hunch though.
 * "in Quincy, Massachusetts (MA)" - are the initials here needed? (Again, "Provincetown, (MA)")
 * I guess not.
 * Just curious, why is this article in d-m-y dates? Nothing wrong with it of course!
 * The US military switched to DMY in the 20th century, so we normally follow that in related articles.
 * The caption for the last image is messed up ("Vermont c. 1919&nsdash;20")
 * Fixed, good catch. Thanks for reviewing the article! Parsecboy (talk) 11:49, 13 June 2015 (UTC)

On hold
A short review, but this is a well written article and is very worthy of becoming GA. Those were the only prose issues I could find, so once they're clarified then this will have no problem passing! JAG UAR   22:10, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for addressing them so fast! This looks good to go now  JAG  UAR   16:59, 13 June 2015 (UTC)