Talk:Ugetsu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 09:01, 15 January 2017 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 09:01, 15 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "masterpiece" sounds and reads better than "masterwork" IMHO.
 * ✅ Both are acceptable but I'm fine with this. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "It is credited with simultaneously helping to popularize Japanese cinema in the West and influencing later Japanese film." — "It is credited with simultaneously helping to popularise Japanese cinema in the West and influencing later Japanese films."
 * "Film" is properly used to describe cinema collectively. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Plot
 * It is above the 400-700 barrier (779 words to be exact). Try and trim it down. Otherwise, this section is good.
 * Film (and this plot) is public domain. I have trimmed down unnecessary details, and left what I think is important. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Production
 * "Director Kenji Mizoguchi made the affects of war a major theme of his film." — affects or effects?
 * ✅ D'oh! Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Mizoguchi was offered to make a film at Daiei Film studios by his old friend Masaichi Nagata." — Can be rephrased as "Mizoguchi was offered to make a film by his old friend Masaichi Nagata at Daiei Film studios."
 * ✅ Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "This story provided a basis for Tōbei's subplot." — Is this mentioned in ref no. 2 (Wakeman 1987), ref no. 4 (Criterion) or in Russell 2011? If so, cite it.
 * The next sentence makes this clear IMO. If anything, this is overcited as stands. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "while Mizoguchi was willingly absent" — Do you mean to say he gave them room to make their (actors) own improvisations on the scenes? If so, mentioning it would be good.
 * ✅ Nothing about improvisations, but clarified. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Southern School in Chinese painting" — Shouldn't it be of instead of in?
 * ✅ Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Wikilink "geza music". Maybe this ought to help.
 * ✅ Never found a link .Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Themes and Release
 * Made a slight ce to the former. Nothing wrong in the latter.
 * ✅ Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Reception
 * BTW, a mention of Anderson's opinion on Ugetsu would be good (If it is stated in Wakeman's book). Otherwise, leave it as it is.
 * "Ugetsu opens with a long panorama around a lake, a shot which begins on the far shore and then tilts down to reveal the village at the conclusion. It closes with the child and the father offering a bowl of rice at the mother's grave ... with the camera moving off into an upward tilting panorama which describes the movement of the opening." — Borders on WP:QUOTEFARM here. Consider explaining part of the sentence a bit rather than quoting it.
 * ✅ Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Legacy
 * Nothing wrong here. This section is good.
 * ✅ Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)


 * References
 * A few redirects and an error on Rotten Tomatoes. Fix it.
 * ✅ I think. Never seen this feature before. Ribbet32 (talk) 01:13, 17 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Good job on improving the article, Ribbet32. Address these comments and the article is promoted to GA. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 09:35, 16 January 2017 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Congratulations! Mizoguchi's masterpiece has passed. — Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 06:52, 17 January 2017 (UTC)