Talk:Underwater camouflage/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LT910001 (talk · contribs) 01:56, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Thanks for creating this article,, a well reading and straightforward analysis of the topic. I think we've met twice before - once at Anatomy, and once for a shorter GA article about performing midget whose name I cannot presently recall. I'll be reviewing this article against the six GA criteria and am happy to discuss anything I raise.--Tom (LT) (talk) 01:56, 18 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Thankyou very much for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:33, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

Comments
Overall a very well-written article. I have a couple of relatively minor issues identified during the review.
 * Thank you!

Very occasionally, the phrasing is quite complicated and could be simplified:
 * "as the environment is relatively homogeneous (albeit variable depending on the lighting), with light always falling from above, while there is generally no variable background as with terrestrial foliage."
 * Reworded. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)


 * "A familiar example is the transparency of the lens of the vertebrate eye, which is made of the protein crystallin, and the vertebrate cornea which is made of the protein collagen"
 * Reworded. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)


 * "The marine hatchetfish is extremely flattened laterally" - I suggest "on its sides"
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. --Tom (LT) (talk) 23:46, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

Other comments:
 * "Reflection through silvering is widespread or dominant in fish of the open sea, especially those that live in the top 100 metres. Where" - would be useful to define what silvering is
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)


 * I suggest remove the hatnote to "Decorator crab" as you refer to more than one animal
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)


 * The Cott (1940) source - its age is not ideal for this article, but it is a widely respected source.
 * On the descriptive side of zoology, he can't be faulted. Where experimental work has been done, later work obviously takes precedence. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:48, 18 April 2016 (UTC)

I am yet to check for copyright/plagiarism, images + verify sources, which I'll do in the next 2-3 days. --Tom (LT) (talk) 02:12, 18 April 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ Images, copyright - no issues. --Tom (LT) (talk) 23:46, 18 April 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ Sources (See below)