Talk:Unfold (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dylan620 (talk · contribs) 18:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

Glad to see this song at GAN; I enjoyed Nurture very much upon release, and this was one of my favorite songs from it. Looking forward to reviewing this article! Dylan 620 (he/him • talk • edits) 18:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
 * That's great, I'm looking forward to your comments! —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 20:09, 25 January 2024 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Disclosure: I filled in a small part of the fair use rationale for the single cover during the process of this review. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I'm going to place this on hold to allow for the concerns below to be addressed. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Disclosure: I filled in a small part of the fair use rationale for the single cover during the process of this review. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I'm going to place this on hold to allow for the concerns below to be addressed. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

Comments
My current thinking is that this article is close to meeting the criteria, but not quite there just yet. Putting on hold. Dylan 620 (he/him • talk • edits) 19:30, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * The song is the only listed collaboration on Nurture [note 1] and Robinson has stated that this was a contributing factor in making the song a callback to his debut album Worlds (2014). — This reads a little run-on-y; maybe replace the "and" with a semicolon?
 * ✅ —TS
 * "Unfold" released to general critical acclaim, and a lyric video for the song was released on May 19, 2021. — I'm not sure if these two clauses are sufficiently related to be in the same sentence.
 * ✅ —TS
 * That "Wind Tempos" features instrumental contributions from Masakatsu Takagi is not verified by the cited source, although there is a source in the album article that mentions this.
 * Good catch! The claim is also verified by the Apple Music description, so I used that instead. ✅. —TS
 * There is no source provided regarding "Fullmoon Lullaby".
 * ❌ as the album is used as the implied primary source here. —TS
 * Fair enough. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 20:33, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * The NME source does not validate the material it cites; did you mean to cite this instead?
 * Whoops, looks like I got those Ben Jolley / NME sources mixed up! ✅. —TS
 * David Klemow feels — the verb tense here is inconsistent with the cited critic opinions throughout the rest of the article.
 * ✅ —TS
 * The same sentence containing the above clause could probably be split in half; it feels a bit like a run-on as is.
 * ✅ —TS
 * Robinson made the decision to move it towards the conclusion of the record — maybe mention that he had originally wanted to place the song near the front?
 * ✅ —TS
 * @Dylan620: Thanks for your review! I've addressed your comments above. —TechnoSquirrel69 (sigh) 20:00, 29 January 2024 (UTC)
 * No prob! I'm satisfied, good work. Passing. Dylan 620  (he/him • talk • edits) 20:33, 29 January 2024 (UTC)