Talk:University of Mississippi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 10:01, 17 July 2021 (UTC)


 * Hello HAL333, I will be taking up the review for this article and will present it to you shortly. I hope my feedback will be helpful to you and that I can learn something new in the process. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 10:01, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Comments

 * In the section on "Integration", Paul B. Johnson Jr. is wikilinked twice, the full name is also unnecessary for a second time, Johnson Jr. should suffice. Lieutenant governor is un-capitalised the first time and capitalised the second time, the second mention doesn't seem necessary. As far as I'm aware titles should also be capitalised whenever they come before the name of a person.
 * Good catch. ~ HAL  333  14:08, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * "With the arrival of night and far-right former Major General Edwin Walker, a mob before the Lyceum became violent." This sentence isn't very clear, I would suggest rephrasing.
 * Rephrased. Does that work? ~ HAL  333  16:59, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * That reads a lot better so yes, it does. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 17:19, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * Near the end, the section on oxford campus shifts to referring to the university as Ole Miss. Since this occurs right after the mention of the Ole Miss Union building, I would recommend not referring to the university by its byname as it can sound a bit confusing.
 * I increased usage so it doesn't pop out as much. ~ HAL  333  17:19, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * Could the section on divisions of the university elaborate a bit on the 15 schools? For example, it doesn't even mention 5 of them.
 * Oops. I missed those. They are in the table now. ~ HAL  333  17:14, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * I think the section on athletics needs a line after the first one mentioning the number of men's and women's teams Ole Miss Rebels has and in which sports.
 * It already does. ~ HAL  333  14:02, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * , right did not realise that the line referred to the rebels. In that case, I think the reference for the two sentences could be improved with a secondary source if possible. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 14:11, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * "This handbook is still given to students today. I would suggest rephrasing this sentence since it uses a relative time reference.
 * Done. ~ HAL  333  14:10, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * The line currently says, "As of 2021, this handbook is still given to students today." The "today" should be removed. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 14:16, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Never mind, I fixed it myself. It was a minor issues anyways. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 14:28, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * "The Daily Mississippian is still in print today." This line uses a relative time reference as well and seems unnecessary since the next line is in the present tense anyways.
 * Good point. Removed. ~ HAL  333  14:03, 22 July 2021 (UTC)


 * I have (hopefully) addressed all of your comments. Cheers. ~ HAL  333  17:20, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * , I've checked them I don't think there's anything else so I'm going to promote it to a good article. Congratulations on the successful nomination and good work on the article in general! Tayi Arajakate  Talk 17:25, 22 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! ~ HAL  333  17:28, 22 July 2021 (UTC)

Assessment
 Comprehension: The article is well written.

Verifiability: The article is verifiable.

Comprehensiveness: The article is comprehensive enough.

Neutrality: The article is neutral.

Stability: The article is stable. Illustration: The article is very well illustrated.

