Talk:Uroš Drenović/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 12:57, 25 January 2015 (UTC)

Will claim this now and aim to complete by say mid-week. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:57, 25 January 2015 (UTC)

Toolbox checks -- no dab or EL issues.

Prose/content -- lightly copyedited; outstanding points:
 * These uprisings commenced in southwest Bosnia in late July, and spread across the NDH, with the Communist Party of Yugoslavia (Komunistička partija Jugoslavije, KPJ) organisation being swept along rather than leading the rebellion. -- this is a little esoteric I think; perhaps, for the uninitiated, you should briefly explain why the Communists (rather than any other group) might have been expected to lead rather than be swept along.
 * In an area largely free of KPJ influence, but under the influence of the sectarian Serb elite of Mrkonjić Grad -- could we avoid repeating "influence", say by using "infiltration" in the first instance, or "sway" in the second, while remaining true to the source?
 * He despised Muslims and Croats but was "diplomatic enough to keep his feelings in check when necessary" -- might be an idea to attribute the quote, e.g. He despised Muslims and Croats but, according to so-and-so, was "diplomatic enough to keep his feelings in check when necessary"
 * the detachment attacked the village, but the rest of the detachment... -- sounds a bit odd, seems the whole detachment did something but then we find there was more of it to do something else; could this be accurately reworded to something like the bulk of the detachment attacked the village, but the rest...?

Structure/referencing/images -- no issues stood out (N.B. Alt text present in main body images but not lead, though not actually a requirement in any case).

Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:50, 29 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review all points addressed, these are my edits. Regards, Peacemaker67  (crack... thump) 00:50, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks good, passing as GA -- well done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:05, 31 January 2015 (UTC)