Talk:Ustaše Youth

Review by CactiStaccingCrane

 * You might want to add IPA pronounciation to "Ustaše Youth".
 * Added.
 * Some phrases can be simplified, from to camp leaders.
 * Removed "individual".
 * Some phrases are a bit "half-facty" and acronymised such as This sentence can be converted and expanded to Ustaše Youth members were involved in the Genocide of Serbs and the Holocaust in the Independent State of Croatia.
 * Done.
 * Keep the title consise. can be reworded to Organizations relations or just Relations.
 * Done
 * Replace curly quotes to straight quotes (").
 * Done, except at "polemicized very sharply against the talk of a “new Europe”", cause idk what should I do with this quote inside of another quote.
 * Be specfic, vague sentences such as should be reworded. One possible solution is Under its regime, liberal democracy, plutocracy, and Yugoslavism.
 * Reworded to Under its regime, all those considered to be of old mentality – liberal democracy, plutocracy, and Yugoslavism
 * Seperate some long sentences. can be break up to Ustaše youth groups were formed in the 1930s and by 1940. They started releasing flyers for Croatian youth coming to their demonstrations, activities, and rallies.
 * I think a long sentence works better here.
 * Remove the slashs, and use or instead.
 * Slashes replaced.
 * Some sentences are unclear. can be converted to Ustaše Youth members from various parts of the state would gather in countryside camps.
 * Don't hyphen words because it looks neat. should be broken up to at least three days long.
 * According to MOS:HYPHEN, hyphens should be used "to link related terms in compound modifiers", I am not a native English speaker but I believe that is the case here.
 * Be neutral, and don't put it in bad or good view. This can be hard with facism. This paragraph is a prime example:

Well, that's it for now. Ping me using once you are done. CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 08:39, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I fail to see how does this paragraph have a POV. The only thing I can see that could be considered not neutral is use of the word "worst" before atrocities but as this is "according to eyewitnesses", I believe that it is NPOV. I have added an inlince citation for that sentence but I don't what else should be changed.
 * I suggest pushing the notes to the article.
 * Stuff in the notes isn't that important and it would make a sentence too wordy IMO.
 * The article is underlinked. Consider linking to more articles, and remove redundant links.
 * This has never been my stronger side, idk what should and what shouldn't be linked. If you want you can point out exact cases, if not then this can be adressed during a formal GA review.
 * An SVG of the youth group should be added. You can request Wikipedians to vectorise it.
 * Added.
 * I have addressed all your points. Thank you for this review. OakMapping (talk) 11:45, 7 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Good luck with your journey! I will add more comments whenever possible :) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 12:25, 7 October 2021 (UTC)