Talk:Värm mer Öl och Bröd/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:18, 9 April 2022 (UTC)

Let's go with another review of a classical composition! --K. Peake 07:18, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Indeed. Thanks as always. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:39, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * My pleasure, brother! --K. Peake 08:49, 9 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The composition is only sourced as dated to 14 November 1771, not written on that date
 * It was certainly written on that date in 1771 as the manuscript survives.
 * Are you sure punctuation should be inside quotation marks for the subtitle?
 * I'd prefer to follow the source but we can try it without.
 * The radical and innovative part should be the last sentence of the lead, as this is about critical commentary
 * reordered.
 * "It details the" → "Värm mer Öl och Bröd details the" per this being a new para
 * No, that would require every paragraph about the song to begin in that way, but there is no such rule.
 * Refs should not be in the lead when all this info is already sourced in the body
 * Removed, except for the one for the word "famous", which will be challenged unless visibly and directly cited. Actually the second one is a direct quotation and I had cited it for that exact reason; we can risk it without.
 * Maybe the English translation should be in brackets and why is there a comma before it, also shouldn't one be before the line itself?
 * Repunctuated, and no, there shouldn't be a comma before the line.
 * "is unusual, too, in being" → "is unusual, in being"
 * No, the continuation is essential here.

Context

 * Good
 * Thanks.

Song

 * Add relevant text to the audio sample
 * Has been done.
 * Shouldn't you write No. before the numbers of the epistles?
 * Done, it's marginal.
 * "to 14 (the pattern recurring in epistle 59, "Hurra Courage, Bagage! God dag Bröder!", also)." → "to 14, as well as the pattern recurring in epistle 59, "Hurra Courage, Bagage! God dag Bröder!"" (exclamation mark can be used to close a sentence in this context)
 * Rearranged.
 * "of fifteen lines." → "of 15 lines." per MOS:NUM
 * Done.

Lyrics

 * Again, are you sure punctuation should be inside quotation marks for the subtitle?
 * Yes.


 * Wikilink Ulla Winblad
 * Pipe warming pan to Bed warmer
 * Done.

Reception and legacy

 * Wikilink Childbirth on the img text
 * Done.
 * Remove wikilink on childbirth in prose; this has already been done in the previous section
 * Done.
 * "In his view," → "In Lindé's view,"
 * Done.
 * "and gripping way."" → "and gripping way"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * No, when a quote is from the end of a sentence the punctuation is included.
 * That only applies when a full sentence is quoted; read through the guideline properly. --K. Peake 06:32, 10 April 2022 (UTC)


 * "with Ulla in" → "with Ulla Winblad in" because she is not a real person
 * Done.
 * "new little Movitz."" → "new little Movitz"."
 * No, when a quote is from the end of a sentence the punctuation is included. Fixed.
 * Why is Epistles capitalised only in the second para?
 * Lower case throughout, except when the full title is given.
 * "in the twentieth century," → "in the 20th century," per MOS:NUM
 * Done.
 * Third para and img look good!
 * Noted.
 * [1] should solely be at the end of the sentence
 * No, it's to protect the adjective "famous" by declaring specifically that this is a direct quotation, and must be immediately adjacent to have any chance of being noticed.
 * Again, maybe the English translation should be in brackets and why is there a comma before it, also shouldn't one be before the line itself?
 * Punctuated as before, and no, as before.
 * Pipe phallic symbol to Phallus
 * Done.
 * Pipe bacchus to Dionysus
 * Done.
 * Pipe Fröja to Freyja
 * Done.
 * Last para looks good!
 * Noted.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed after this quick review! --K. Peake 08:49, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:49, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * This looks good, apart from the MOS:QUOTE issues that I still explained need fixing in further detail above. --K. Peake 06:32, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
 * OK, done. If any more tiny tweaks needed, feel free to fix them. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:37, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, this all looks good now! --K. Peake 17:14, 10 April 2022 (UTC)