Talk:VR Class Sm3/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Arsenikk (talk • contribs • count ) 13:42, 6 September 2011 (UTC)

I am placing the article on hold. Although there are a few issues, overall it is quite good. Arsenikk (talk)  13:42, 6 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Comments:
 * The lead is rather short; I would particularly like to see more "hard facts" about the train there. Also, some of the content in the lead is not mentioned in the body.
 * Try to avid mixing digits and spelled-out numbers in the same sentence (e.g. "two trainsets and 23 options"). (fixed)
 * Link currencies, use ISO codes for when used later in the article. (fixed)
 * Avoid using the word "claim", as it has a negative annotation, see WP:WEASEL. Instead, say that he "stated" or similar.
 * Don't say "at the end of the year 1997", but just "at the end of 1997". (fixed)
 * Avoid using internal references to other parts of the article. (fixed)
 * Names of ships are in italics. (fixed)
 * The phrase " to speed up its weight of" reads very awkward.
 * Temperature and noise levels are not referenced.
 * There is a citation needed tag which needs to be resolved.
 * Please find a better term than "professionnal help".
 * I am a bit concerned about the "criticism" section. All the content there is valid, but in general criticism sections are frowned upon as they are inherently POV. I would recommend that he content be merged into the history section. See for instance NSB Class 73 where the criticism has been woven in.
 * Avoid using all-caps in references, instead use "start case".
 * Image licenses check out good.


 * Thanks for the feedback. I was wondering about the criticism section as well, I will merge it in the main history section within a few days in addition to fixing the other minor problems.--Yaamboo (talk) 05:22, 8 September 2011 (UTC)
 * All right, I've tried to fix the problems now. --Yaamboo (talk) 06:49, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Congratulations with a good article. Arsenikk (talk)  10:37, 14 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks, it's been an interesting experience :) --Yaamboo (talk) 13:16, 14 September 2011 (UTC)