Talk:Vajroli mudra/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 04:02, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
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 * Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:16, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * The first sentence of the lead is just copy-pasted into "Mudra" in the same position.
 * Noted. It seems reasonable that this brief summary should be there also.


 * It is described in the Hatha Yoga Pradipika 3.82–89. No citation given. Could you add the description, too?
 * That is a citation, and the paragraph already describes it. Added it to the list of references.
 * Still needs an in-line citation for verifiability. –Vami
 * I added one.


 * In "Reception", there are many, many redundant citations within paragraphs with only a single given citation. The major culprits are citations [2], [6], and [10].
 * I've removed repeated citations except where needed to support direct "..." quotations.


 * Could Hatha Yoga be discussed some, since Vajroli mudra is nested in it, and the topic is derided as as unscientific and dangerous?
 * Good point. Added in Context section.
 * What is hatha yoga? What is distinct about it? Looking for that sort of information, put succinctly. –Vami
 * Added similarities and differences.