Talk:Valerio Ricetti

Biography assessment rating comment
The article may be improved by following the WikiProject Biography 11 easy steps to producing at least a B article. -- Jreferee 17:15, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
 * Thanks for this feedback Jreferee. I have now adjusted and added as many of the above steps as I think I can. Can you give me any futher assessment or thoughts please? -- VS  talk 22:33, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
 * Hi VirtualSteve. You may want to revise the footnotes. I did the first two. Check out the categories used in the articles to which are dynamic linked in the Valerio Ricetti.  The talk page for these articles may have banners that you can use on your article and the article page for these articles may have Categories that you may use in the Valerio Ricetti article. -- Jreferee 22:54, 9 March 2007 (UTC) I also added a peer review request. -- Jreferee 23:06, 9 March 2007 (UTC)

Another comment
Hi. I have a suggestion:
 * Most of the references in this article are focused on Hermit's Cave rather than Ricetti himself. I think you should rely more on NSW Heritage Official Website, as it has a brief biography of Valerio Ricetti (where he was born, why did he migrate to Australia, etc.) Dalobuca 18:53, 10 March 2007 (UTC)

Thanks Dalobuca. Appreciate the comment. Yes that was part of my plan once I read the Heritage papers in full but I was a little ill yesterday so was delayed in finishing. Has now been completed.-- VS talk 00:52, 11 March 2007 (UTC)

Valerio Ricetti peer review (copied from here)
This article has the makings of a featured article and that would be a good goal for it. Please review the article to help it advance to the next level. -- Jreferee 23:00, 9 March 2007 (UTC)

Yannismarou
It needs work. This is my review:
 * The lead is not properly written. It is short and IMO does not consistute a proper summary of the page.
 * Most sections atre uncited or undercited. See for instance "Early life in Australia".
 * "Unfortunately he left the brothel somewhat absentmindedly leaving his wallet and its contents behind." Avoid adverbs like "unfortunately" that could be regarded as POV.
 * Many one-sentence paragraphs that make the prose listy. Merge or expand.
 * For quotes we use qms (""); not italics as you often do in "World War II internment".
 * For web sources, you can use Template:cite web or Template:cite news.--Yannismarou 19:03, 12 March 2007 (UTC)

Peripitus
In addition to the above comments: - Peripitus (Talk) 00:30, 13 March 2007 (UTC)
 * There are 3 sources that should be incorporated into the inline references rather than being noted as sources alone.
 * Should read and add material from From Broken Hill to Scenic Hill - the true story and part of Griffith's history, the Scenic Hill hermit Valerio Ricetti, 1898-1952 - Ceccato, Peter (2001). This seems available a Griffith library and possibly others
 * unlink partial dates like 1952
 * add non-breaking spaces per the style manual so 16 hectares -> 16&nbsp ;hectares

Thank you
This is very helpful - thank you. I will try to address some or all of these issues this coming weekend.-- VS talk 07:09, 20 March 2007 (UTC)