Talk:Vaporwave/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 100cellsman (talk · contribs) 04:34, 5 March 2019 (UTC)

Surprised nobody had reviewed this article yet, so I'll look it through. 100cellsman (talk) 04:34, 5 March 2019 (UTC)

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>>>>Copyvio<<<<
Dummy’s “Comment: Vaporwave and the pop-art of the virtual plaza”, and “Is Vaporwave The Next Seapunk?” and “Inside Hardvapour, an Aggressive, Wry Rebellion Against Vaporwave”, both from Vice are marked yellow in the copyvio detector. Please shorten or paraphrase sections that use these sources.

Lead
I would advise against using citations in the lead unless they’re being used for potentially controversial claims.

Characteristics
“Early incarnations of vaporwave relied on the sampling of sources such as smooth jazz, retro elevator music, R&B, lounge music, and dance music from the 1980s and 1990s, with the music made of "brief, cut-up sketches", cleanly produced, and composed almost entirely from samples, along with the application of slowed-down chopped and screwed techniques, looping, and other effects.” Maybe its a manual of style thing, but this I feel like this statement just goes on and on without occasional stops.

“Critic Adam Trainer notes the style's predilection for” The use of the word “note” doesn’t seem appropriate.

Maybe shorten or paraphrase Adam Harper describing the typical vaporwave track.

2009-2011: Origins and early scene
“while Far Side Virtual drew primarily on "the grainy and bombastic beeps" of 2000s media such as Skype and the Nintendo Wii.” The source doesn’t state that just 2000s media were used. Just complete the last part of the attribution that include Windows and Mac OS.

“A 2013 post on a music blog…” Is there a name of that music blog?

Critical interpretations
I find it interesting that you incorporated a study that described hypermodulation. While I feel like it does give more context in regard to the rise and fall of vaporwave, I’m not entirely sure whether or not the wording of the study makes it drift off from the subject.

Offshoots and subgenres
I couldn’t find Blank Banshee 0 popularizing vaportrap in the source.

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, it's a couple weeks overdue, but here's my review! 100cellsman (talk) 05:27, 23 March 2019 (UTC)

✅ except "complete the last part of the attribution" - confused by what part or attribution you meant ILTP (talk) 10:39, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
 * I meant to include Windows and Mac OS in the part that describes "the grainy and bombastic beeps" as it does in the source. But then again, Windows 95 was already mentioned in the Critical interpretations section, so there might not be a need to mention it up there again. 100cellsman (talk) 18:33, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Since the article has minor issues at this point, I'm going to go ahead and hurriedly pass the article because this review had been up for a month. It otherwise meets the criteria. 100cellsman (talk) 06:28, 9 May 2019 (UTC)