Talk:Vecihi K-VI/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: PizzaKing13 (talk · contribs) 22:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this article PizzaKing13   ¡Hablame!  22:03, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Development and production

 * Split "On 14 June 1923, Hürkuş finished the technical drawings of the plane, which was to be used for training and reconnaissance purposes,[1]" and "and showed the project to lieutenant general Muzaffer Ergüder, an inspector in the air force, three days later, on 17 June." into 2 sentences
 * Remove the comma after "three days later"
 * Add "the drawings" after "After inspecting"
 * Remove the comma after "congratulated Hürkuş"
 * "a captured plane" do we know what model plane?
 * "at least 16 hours a day on the plane" → "at least 16 hours a day working on the plane"
 * "He was briefly sent away for a few months" during what months?
 * Remove the comma after "14 months"

Operational history

 * Remove the comma after "Seydiköy Airfield"
 * Per MOS:FOREIGNQUOTE, the original Turkish quote for "should hop in and fly if he trusts [his] plane" and "met with lingering" should be included directly after the English translation in parenthesis. ("Turkish quote")
 * Since those sources use the Sfn template I can't add the  parameter. I made a work around, please check.


 * "Hürkuş and his plane waited almost a month." what did he wait for and why did he have to wait?
 * Remove the comma after "filled with a crowd"
 * Remove the comma after "was towed to the hangar"
 * Remove the comma after "short jail sentence"
 * "overturned later" → "later overturned"
 * "stayed" → "remained"
 * "His requests to store the plane in an indoor area were also declined" declined by who?
 * "The Turkish Aeronautical Association officially requested" when?
 * "The Vecihi K-VI was later destroyed" when?
 * The fate of the aircraft after the flight is largly unknown and I don't have a date for this or the suggestion above. I have added a date on when Hürkuş found out that he wouldn't be able to get the plane back in any case. Any effort to return it would likely be before September 1925.


 * Remove the comma after "named the Vecihi K-XIV"

Overall

 * Images properly licensed
 * No war edits
 * Neutral
 * Broad and focused
 * Sources are ok

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:


 * I've left some comments for the review above. PizzaKing13   ¡Hablame!  22:26, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I've made some changes. Styyx (talk) 08:32, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Edits look good. I fixed the quote thing myself since it's hard to explain. Good work, I'll pass this review. PizzaKing13   ¡Hablame!  18:20, 2 August 2023 (UTC)