Talk:Vegas Golden Knights/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cherrell410 (talk · contribs) 02:42, 24 June 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 9.1%
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Suggestions for improvement will be left below
 * Lead: The lead section shouldn't include references, unless absolutely necessary. Most of the time, I would let one or two slide, but this article has 8 references. These should be removed, and the content that they are referencing should be explained later in the article.
 * Background and establishment: could you define what phase ii and phase iii are, and get a source for phase iii
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for 2017 draft paragraph, as the one given is about the first game (make sure source provides info about everything in the paragraph, use multiple if needed)
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for winning 8 of first 9 games
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for Shipachyov's retirement
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): "they have led the pacific since december 23, 2017" is unclear. in every game since then, the knights have led the division in all seasons? that needs to be more clear to specify that that was just for 2017-18. if that is true, i would like multiple sources verifing this. If it isn't true i still need a source for this statement
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for first game
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018) - last sentence of section: source given doesn't prove everything in the sentence
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): neal and david perron - it should be james neal and david perron
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): "after a late jonathan marchessault game-tying" --> "after a late game-tying ... by jonathan marchessault"
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): space after ref 85
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): info about the hiring of mccrimmon and whatever happened to mcphee
 * 2022–23: Stanley Cup champions: more sources needed in 3rd para (begins with the golden knights began...)
 * Cherrell410 (talk) 01:07, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Suggestions for improvement will be left below
 * Lead: The lead section shouldn't include references, unless absolutely necessary. Most of the time, I would let one or two slide, but this article has 8 references. These should be removed, and the content that they are referencing should be explained later in the article.
 * Background and establishment: could you define what phase ii and phase iii are, and get a source for phase iii
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for 2017 draft paragraph, as the one given is about the first game (make sure source provides info about everything in the paragraph, use multiple if needed)
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for winning 8 of first 9 games
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for Shipachyov's retirement
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): "they have led the pacific since december 23, 2017" is unclear. in every game since then, the knights have led the division in all seasons? that needs to be more clear to specify that that was just for 2017-18. if that is true, i would like multiple sources verifing this. If it isn't true i still need a source for this statement
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018): source needed for first game
 * Start of operations and the inaugural season (2017–2018) - last sentence of section: source given doesn't prove everything in the sentence
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): neal and david perron - it should be james neal and david perron
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): "after a late jonathan marchessault game-tying" --> "after a late game-tying ... by jonathan marchessault"
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): space after ref 85
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): info about the hiring of mccrimmon and whatever happened to mcphee
 * 2022–23: Stanley Cup champions: more sources needed in 3rd para (begins with the golden knights began...)
 * Cherrell410 (talk) 01:07, 25 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): "after a late jonathan marchessault game-tying" --> "after a late game-tying ... by jonathan marchessault"
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): space after ref 85
 * Continued contention and first Stanley Cup championship (2018–present): info about the hiring of mccrimmon and whatever happened to mcphee
 * 2022–23: Stanley Cup champions: more sources needed in 3rd para (begins with the golden knights began...)
 * Cherrell410 (talk) 01:07, 25 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review, and apologies for the late response. I'll do my best to fix the issues this week. The Kip (talk) 00:10, 27 June 2023 (UTC)
 * @Cherrell410 Everything should be cleaned up now. Most stuff sourced, some bits that couldn't be were removed. I left one ref in the lead for the record, as it falls under a more controversial statement; otherwise, it should be good to go. The Kip (talk) 07:26, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Okay. Give me a minute to check everything, but congrats on your GA! Cherrell410 (talk) 15:57, 28 June 2023 (UTC)
 * And thank you for the prompt review! I was expecting to wait a few months for this, haha. The Kip (talk) 16:03, 28 June 2023 (UTC)

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