Talk:Vennture Brew Company/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 18:23, 17 January 2023 (UTC)


 * Cheers for another great article! I have left some comments below. Like last time, please ping me once you have addressed these concerns so that I may know when to reevaluate. Thanks!  𓃦 LunaEatsTuna  (💬) 18:29, 17 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work on the changes! I am now happy to pass this article for GA status. Congrats on another fantastic GA! Hopefully you can get that image soon :)  𓃦 LunaEatsTuna  (💬) 02:08, 18 January 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go. But:
 * "involved the creation of a 60-page business plan" is a bit word for word – recommend something like "involved the creation of a business plan 60 pages long" instead.

Prose

 * The lead could probably be expanded by a few sentence.
 * "coffee shop and brewery was kindled" – wikilink brewery.
 * "at the intersection of coffee, beer, and community." – "coffee, beer, and community" should have quotation marks.
 * "dove into the intricacies" – sounds slightly on the informal side. Is a better word choice available? Otherwise, apologies if this is standard in American English though, which I do not speak.
 * "been brewing beer at home for years" – recommend "been homebrewing for years prior" and wikilink homebrewing.
 * "took a job at a nearby taproom." – wikilink taproom.
 * "They were also boosted" – informal, rephrase. Also;
 * Could the Kickstarter campaign be expanded upon? It sounds quite noteworthy. Do the sources say when/who started the campaign, how many backers it had, their goal, etc?
 * I think "1%" should be changed to "one percent" for formality.
 * Unabbreviate both mentions of North Ave.
 * "espresso-based drinks plus tea sourced" – change to "espresso-based drinks as well as tea sourced"

Refs
All sources are RS or used appropriately. Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 1, 4, 6, 7 or 10.

Other
Short description, See also, coords, navs and cats good.


 * Do we have any free images of the brewery available? Also, what about the logo?
 * Recommend adding template:Use X English.
 * Recommend adding template:Use mdy dates.


 * Hello again ! As before, I've implemented all the requested changes with specific exceptions/comments below.
 * Unfortunately, none of the sources that I've seen or remember seeing go into detail about the Kickstarter. I would instead link to it directly as a primary source... but kickstarter.com is on either our blacklist or the Wikimedia global one.
 * Oh well, not a problem.
 * I've been meaning to walk down and get a free photo of the brewery, which is located near my residence, but haven't had the chance to yet. An attempt to get a high-quality photo directly from them was successful up until the point I had to explain the intricacies of free licensing and why I needed specially emailed permissions. They stopped replying after that. Ed [talk] [majestic titan] 01:44, 18 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Oof, strange how some folks get really confused about this sorta stuff!