Talk:Venus in fiction/GA1

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Reviewer: TompaDompa (talk · contribs) 14:36, 22 January 2022 (UTC)

I will review this. As an initial observation, there are a few citation needed tags. TompaDompa (talk) 14:36, 22 January 2022 (UTC)

Comments: TompaDompa (talk) 21:54, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
 * In general, the prose is rather flowery and example-heavy. It needs copyediting for tone and conciseness. That's a bit subjective. I'll ping User:Nihil novi, a copyeditor I know, to see if they'd like to read through this article? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  11:20, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
 * There are duplicate references to The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy, and both link to the wrong volume. ✅
 * The article switches back and forth between Venus's and Venus'. ✅
 * There are a bunch of curly apostrophes and quotation marks that should be replaced with straight ones. Is there a script for this? I am terrible at fixing this manually. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  11:20, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
 * The image in the WP:LEAD seems mostly decorative. If there is something in particular that it is meant to illustrate, this should be clarified in the caption. Not sure how to clarify this better without going into OR. We discuss Venus representation in science fiction, including pulp magazines, and this is a cover of one with a Venusian story? I could modify the caption to this if you don't call me on OR :) ", Venus was also a common feature in short stories published in the early science fiction magazines. Here, a cover of the Planet Stories, Winter 1939 issue, featuring the story Gold Amazons of Venus." The first sentence is copied from the text where it is referenced. Whether this image should be moved to illustrate that section (now, imageless) instead of the lead, I am not sure. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  11:20, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I added a version of this myself. Feel free to copyedit it. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Its impenetrable cloud cover gave science fiction writers free rein to speculate on conditions at its surface; all the more so when early observations showed that not only was it very similar in size to Earth, it possessed a substantial atmosphere. – "all the more so" is not a terribly encyclopaedic phrasing, and one would assume that a substantial atmosphere is a prerequisite for an impenetrable cloud cover.
 * ✅ Lead has been rewritten. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:52, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * The genre reached its peak between the 1930s and 1950s – genre? ✅ Word removed
 * science had revealed some aspects of Venus, but not yet the harsh truth of its surface conditions – suggest "nature" rather than "truth". ✅
 * as the reality of Venus as a hostile, toxic inferno became known, the early tropes of adventures in a lush, verdant paradise – both "hostile, toxic inferno" and "lush, verdant paradise" are overly poetic phrasings here. I think that's subjective, other encyclopedias do use such terms, and we are talking about literature here. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  11:52, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * I noticed that both phrasings appear verbatim in The Mammoth Encyclopedia of Science Fiction (Venus, before it was found to be a hostile, toxic inferno, was imagined to be a lush, verdant paradise.). That doesn't look good, especially considering that The Mammoth Encyclopedia of Science Fiction is not cited anywhere in the article. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Nice find, but I don't believe two adjectives + noun can be considered a copyvio (if the sentence was originally closer to that source, it went through enough rewordins sine). We are allowed to use the elegant (IMHO) expression "hostile, toxic inferno" and "lush, verdant paradise" without attribution, which I don't believe is necessary, given plethora of other sources supporting this kind of description in the body. Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:58, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Not a copyvio, just not a terribly good look. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Among the earliest representations of the planet Venus in fiction is – since this is followed by two examples, it should be "are". ✅
 * The first science fiction novel concerned specifically with Venus was Achille Eyraud's Voyage à Venus (1865). – WP:Close paraphrasing . ✅?
 * No, not really. The source says The first novel concerned specifically with Venus was Achille Eyraud's Voyage à Venus ["Voyage to Venus"] (1865). and the current phrasing The first science fiction novel specifically focused on Venus was Achille Eyraud's Voyage à Venus (Voyage to Venus, 1865). is still way too close. You could perhaps remedy this by incorporating what Stableford says about it into the sentence. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Since you went to the trouble of already thinking how to reword it and with what sources, would you mind doing that in the body (or here, with a reference)? I am not sure where to look for whatever Stableford is saying that is relevant. Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:59, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * What Stableford says is Achille Eyraud's Voyage à Venus (1865) contrasts it very favourably with Earth. Adam Roberts also writes a fair bit about it in The History of Science Fiction, page 157–158. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I took a stab at it. It could probably be further improved. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It was a common setting for many works of the scientific romance genre. – this is a stronger assertion than the cited source supports. The source only says Early Scientific Romances set on Venus include Gustavus W Pope's Romances of the Planets, No. 2: Journey to Venus (1895) and John Munro's A Trip to Venus (1897). Fair enough, removed as Science Fact and Science Fiction: An Encyclopedia actually says (p.547) "images of Venus were much rarer in scientific romance" - I think comparing it to the genre of exotic romance Stableford mentions few sentences earlier. But I am not sure "exotic romance" is a notable concept that that merits mentioning at all... --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  11:52, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * A Narrative of the Travels and Adventures of Paul Aermont Among the Planets was published anonymously; "Paul Aermont" is not the name of the author but the name of the fictional narrator. ✅
 * Venus was large enough for entire series to be set there – improper editorializing. The sources do not attribute this to size. ✅ I disagree this is editorializing, we are allowed to make some figures of speech, and I think this is what it is. That said, I see no problem with replacing this adjective with 'popular', which should address this issue. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:52, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * the early science fiction magazines – the word "pulp" should be included along with a link to pulp magazine. ✅
 * In the 1930s, Edgar Rice Burroughs wrote the "sword-and-planet" style "Venus series," set on a fictionalized version of Venus known as Amtor. – this is the same series as the one beginning with Pirates of Venus mentioned in the preceding paragraph. The details of this sentence ("sword-and-planet", "Venus series", "Amtor") are of course unsourced.
 * ✅ C/e. Added a ref for the details of the series . I am not sure this stuff really needs to be sourced, particularly that it is a Venus-series. There is such stuff as common sense and WP:BLUESKY... --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:57, 17 March 2022 (UTC)
 * The Venus of Robert Heinlein's Future History series and Henry Kuttner's Fury resembled Arrhenius' vision of Venus. – Arrhenius' Venus has not been described up to this point. This sentence is also unsourced and tagged accordingly. ✅ (the sentence has been rewritten/removed)
 * Venus cloud cover – should be "Venusian cloud cover", "cloud cover of Venus", or similar. ✅
 * This link should be added to the Life on Other Worlds: The 20th-Century Extraterrestrial Life Debate reference. ✅
 * A link to Svante Arrhenius is sufficient, no need to refer to him as a chemist or a Nobel Prize winner as neither is relevant to his speculations about the conditions of Venus. I'm also not convinced that this example is really necessary. ❌ I respectfully disagree. The example is relevant, and clarifying that he was an important scholar and not a writer seems relevant. But I have removed it from this section as as you later point our correctly, its redundant to discuss this twice. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:17, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Fair enough about being a scholar rather than a writer. The current Nobel-laureate chemist Svante Arrhenius is also way better than the previous chemist and Nobel Prize winner Svante Arrhenius. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Early astronomers [...] perhaps a desert. is followed by five references, but I don't see why citing Launius or Taylor and Grinspoon is necessary here? It's also a rather long sentences with a bunch of commas and a parenthetical statement, so readability could probably be improved by restructuring it. ❌ The sentence went through some c/e since you saw it last, but the c/e and me did not think it requires major revision. Regarding too many cites, I am to opposed to removing some, but they all mention Arrhenius's claims. Do we remove some refs at random and then double-check every fact in that sentence is still verifiable? I'd leave it as it is and move on. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:17, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I replaced those citations with The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy, which covers this aspect both in the context of science and science fiction. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Many of the early portrayals of Venus and associated tropes relate to the life and landscape of Venus. – this adds very little and should be removed for conciseness. ✅ (the sentence has been rewritten/removed)
 * portrayed it is as a – stray "is". ✅
 * a view that only in time because modified by scientific findings – was "became" meant here? I'm also not quite clear on what "only in time" is supposed to convey here. The sentence is in general a bit difficult to parse. ✅ (the sentence has been rewritten/removed). Well, the because word removed. In time, I think, is self explanatory from the context; in either way, the article has been copyedit by another editor and they didn't see this expression as problematic enough to remove. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 13:24, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
 * The addition of context (the Sagan quote) helps a lot with clarity. That being said, this isn't verified by the cited source. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The image of the ruins in the jungle does not pass WP:IMAGERELEVANCE. The ruins are at least as visually striking a feature as the jungle, but it is the latter the image is presumably meant to illustrate. The visual impression one gets is not so much "the jungles of Venus" as "the ruins of a civilization". ❌ I see your point, but first, it's subjective (although I do agree with you, actually), and second, we don't have other free images to replace this with. I wasn't happy that this is the best I found, but it is what it is. I wouldn't be opposed to replacing this, but semi-relevan image is still IMHO superior to no image. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 13:24, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The quote from Sagan should not receive this prominent a placement. It's a pretty interesting quote, but it should either be worked into the main prose or removed altogether. ✅
 * Many writers and scientists expected that the planet would have land masses, but not dry ones. – "expected that the planet would have land masses" is a slightly weird phrasing, and one that I would expect to be accompanied by an explanation of what else they should expect if not that (an entirely gaseous planet? An entirely solid planet without surface divisions? An entirely liquid-covered planet?). The meaning of "not dry ones" is also not entirely clear. ✅ replaced with "and a humid climate". --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 13:29, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Venus of swamps and jungles – suggest that "of" be replaced by something else, perhaps "covered with". ✅
 * Fred T. Jane does not need to be linked twice. ✅
 * Arrhenius' (incorrect) deductions about Venus are mentioned in two separate paragraphs. Once is enough, and the combined length is clearly disproportionate. I also did some quick spot-checking, and it doesn't seem like it is entirely supported by the cited sources either. I removed the redundancy; can you clarify what isn't entirely supported by the cited sources? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:20, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * This has been reflected in other works or fiction and became "a staple of pulp science fiction imagnery". – it should be clarified what "this" refers to. There is a tense mismatch between "has been reflected" and "became". The last word has a typo and should be "imagery". ✅
 * Several of Stanley G. Weinbaum short stories – either remove "of" or say "Weinbaum's". ✅
 * short stories of the 1930s – suggest either writing "1930s short stories" or "short stories from the 1930s" to avoid the possible interpretation "short stories depicting the 1930s". ✅
 * set in the tropical jungles of Venus – what the source says is "on a tropical Venus". Tropical doesn't necessarily mean jungle. ✅
 * Now it says set in Venusian jungles, which is even further from what the source says. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Can you elaborate on what does the source say and why you find it not supported? Seriously, half the sources talk about Venusian swamps and jungles, this is the major part of the very trope we are discussing... <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 16:01, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The source says In the 1930s, Stanley G. Weinbaum set several classic short stories on a tropical Venus. whereas the article currently says Several of Weinbaum's short stories from the 1930s are set in Venusian jungles. Tropical ≠ jungles. I would just remove this and write about Weinbaum's depictions of life on the planet in the appropriate section instead, since that's what the sources focus on (depictions of extraterrestrial life is also what Weinbaum is perhaps most known for). TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * set on "swampy landscapes" of Venus – the quotation marks should be removed. It should either be "set on the swampy landscapes of Venus" or "set on swampy landscapes on Venus". ✅
 * Pirates of Venus is variously identified as being from 1932 and 1934. ✅ "It was first serialized in six parts in Argosy in 1932 and published in book form two years later by Edgar Rice Burroughs, Inc. " Sigh. *rolls the dice* I'll go with 1932 for the first mention an remove it as unnecessary repetition from the second. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:19, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
 * several more sequels – remove "more". ✅
 * portray the fungal, fetid Venusian swamps – what the source says is "saw Venus as a world of unhealthy fecundity whose swamps were rife with fungal disease", which is not quite the same. I think it's close enough, feel free to suggest a rewrite. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:19, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Since further examples from The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy (which says depicting a sodden Venus [...] that hardly differed from Burroughs's after noting that Burroughs depicted Venus as having swamps) have been added, I changed it to portray Venusian swamps. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Ray Bradbury's short stories "The Long Rain" and "All Summer in a Day" also depicted Venus as a habitable planet with incessant rain. – not found in the cited source. ✅ new ref added
 * The added source doesn't verify the jungle setting of the latter story, and the SFE source doesn't really verify "habitable" (which is word that could simply be removed) for the former story. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I've reworded the sentence slightly and added a new source that discusses this story with the focus on the rain. However, "Habitable" is common sense, since humans can survive there, and so does various animals. Jungles are, common sensicaly, habitable, and planets that sport them, even more so. As such, I don't see a problem with that word. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 16:09, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * "Habitable" implies "for humans", so is fine if humans are mentioned living there but not otherwise. Anyway, this has been resolved now. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * "The Long Rain" and "Death-by-Rain" are the same story. ✅
 * Venus as Panthalassa – should be "as a panthalassa" with indefinite article, no initial capital letter, and no link. The capitalized version that is linked is a specific example of an "all-ocean" that existed in Earth's history. I've clarified it was intended to be a comparison. I certainly think the link is very much needed for context. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:48, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * could not exist, they said, because – not a terribly encyclopaedic phrasing. Should be rephrased, perhaps along the lines of "were thought impossible due to the assumption that". ✅
 * The City of Lost Books is a blog. Only a very small part of the material it is cited for (about Stapledon's Last and First Men) is supported by the other source, so it needs to be replaced. Aaaggh, I lost my replies for two hours work. TL;DR, the author is an academic so this meets WP:SPS. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  10:42, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
 * See below. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Works such as d Clifford D. Simak’s – stray "d". Simak is already linked above. ✅
 * a Cambrian-like Venus covered by a near-planet-wide ocean filled with exotic aquatic life – this goes far beyond what the cited sources actually say.
 * portrays mankind survivors from devastated Earth living in Venusian submarines – the source says mankind lives in the submarine "keeps" of Venus. That would be underwater fortresses (or lairs, perhaps), not submarines. ✅
 * and has even inspired a 1991 sequel – should be stated more matter-of-factly. ✅
 * In 1922 [...] – unsourced and tagged accordingly. ✅
 * Among the more original visions of Venus is that from one of the early novels set on there, namely Garrett Serviss' A Columbus of Space – assessments of originality need to come from the sources and should not be stated as facts since they are subjective. This sentence is also phrased in a very indirect way which makes it much longer than it needs to be. ✅
 * "tidal-locked" should be "tidally locked". ✅
 * On the other hand, the lack of common vision of Venus resulted in less consistent, or non-existent, mythology of Venus (particularly compared to the image of Mars in fiction). – I can't quite put my finger on why, but I found this a bit difficult to parse. ✅
 * described the situation as a writer equivalent of a "cosmic Rorschach test" – remove "a writer equivalent of". The quotation marks do the trick. Link to Rorschach test (MOS:LINKQUOTE says that we usually shouldn't put links inside quotations, but this is one of the exceptions where we should).
 * with numerous authors populating the land Venusian featureless clouds with various exotic but usually habitable settings – it seems like a few words might be missing here? ✅
 * The image of the cover of An Earth Man on Venus needs a caption that makes it clear what it is meant to illustrate (presumably something about the kinds of lifeforms that are found on Venus in fictional works?) or else be removed. ✅
 * Gustavus Pope's Journey to Venus (1895) – earlier in the article, it's Gustavus W. Pope’s Romances of the Planets, no 2: Journey to Venus. Both the author's name and the title should be rendered consistently, and the author should only be linked once. ✅
 * is a classic early science fiction – in this sense, "classic" is a MOS:Word to watch. The source doesn't use that word. ✅
 * Perhaps owing to the association of Venus with the goddess of love: – the colon here is a bit odd. I'd just use a comma. ✅
 * intelligent natives of Venus, known as Venusians, – this could be replaced with only "Venusians". The sources don't really explicitly say that the natives of Venus are known as Venusians nor do they speak of intelligent Venusians versus non-intelligent ones. ✅
 * gentle, ethereal, and beautiful – the source only says gentle and ethereal, from which beautiful may be inferred regardless. I think it's a useful qualiier, used by ESF too.✅
 * an enduring image – rather than labelling it as such, present the facts about its longevity. ✅ Removed.
 * Bernard le Bovyer de Fontenelle's Entretiens sur la pluralité des mondes habités (1686; translated to English by J Glanvill as A Plurality of Worlds in 1929) – we have an article at Bernard Le Bovier de Fontenelle. We also have an article at Conversations on the Plurality of Worlds. The translation details should be removed. ✅
 * I removed the translation details. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * This trope has been repeated [...] – I would try to combine this sentence with the preceding one. I would also combine the two paragraphs about Venusians. ✅
 * winged, angel-like Venusian – "angel-like" is not supported by the cited source, but you can just add Stableford p. 547 to address that. ✅
 * is later the protagonist of an interplanetary tour in the form of a series of nine Letters from the Planets (1887-1893) – WP:Close paraphrasing. ✅
 * A similar trope, of a Venusian visitor to Earth, is seen in – I would just say "A Venusian also visits Earth in". The word "trope" appears quite a few times in the article and is a more conspicuous term than "theme" or "motif" (where those would be appropriate). ✅
 * Both James William Barlow and John Munro penned in-depth descriptions of Venusian civilizations in their, respectively, A History of a Race of Immortals Without a God (1891) and A Trip to Venus (1897). – the source only seems to say this about the former? ✅
 * Even before the era of space probes, – the sentence would read better if this bit were removed and the sentence started with "Scientific discourse [...]". The next sentence gets into space probes anyway. ✅
 * as the advanced methods of observation of Venus suggested its atmosphere lacks any oxygen – I would say more advanced rather than the advanced. I would say "lacks oxygen" or "is devoid of oxygen". ✅
 * After the onset of the space race in the early second half of the 20th century – Space Race should be linked if it is mentioned at all, but this could all be replaced with the word "Later" in the interest of conciseness.✅
 * found that the planet's surface temperature was 800 F – I think it's pretty obvious that 800°F is an approximate value, so 427°C is a value with false precision. The sources are sufficient to say that the temperature is above 800°F and above 400°C. One might also consider something along the lines of "hundreds of degrees above the boiling point of water", which is a comparison the sources don't explicitly make but it's such a standard one that it shouldn't be hard to find one that does. ✅ (added above, not changing further since I think it's ok otherwise)
 * Writing in the interval 800–900 F would reflect the sources better than the current above 800 F. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I implemented this myself. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Obsolescent" means "in the process of becoming obsolete". In this context it should be "obsolete". ✅
 * does occasionally resurfaces – grammar. ✅
 * scientific understanding of venus – capitalization. ✅
 * exploration and survival of the hostile Venus – exploration of, but survival on. I also don't know that this really reflects what the cited sources say. ✅ With minor tweaks, and I think this is what they say... :> --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Survival, sure. Exploration is way more dubious. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I added a source that mentions "explorers". TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Other enduring concepts include the topics of colonization of Venus and terraforming of Venus. – "Other enduring concepts include the topics of" is a bit clunky. I would also suggest writing "colonizing and terraforming Venus" with links to the broader articles space colonization and terraforming here. Links to Colonization of Venus and Terraforming of Venus can go in their respective sections below. ❌ I reread it and I think it's fine as it is. It's referenced and connects to the subsequent sections.
 * It should be mentioned that sci-fi interest in the planet diminished when its inhospitability became better understood. Both The Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Science Fact and Science Fiction: An Encyclopedia mention this. ✅
 * It now says Following a brief period of disinterest in writing stories set in the Solar System, now known to be a rather hostile environment [...] – surely that should be Venus rather than the entire Solar System? TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Right you are, fixed. ✅ <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:42, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Rather than saying "While the idea of colonizing Venus [...], it grew [...]", I would say "Colonization of Venus [...], and grew [...]". ❌ I think the current wording is more clear. Subjective, I guess, but this went through copyediting that the copyeditor didn't change that part (although they did change many others you pointed out). --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * has been penned – suggest "appeared in fiction". ✅
 * more challenging that – than. ✅
 * the trilogy by Rolf Garner (beginning with Resurgent Dust, 1953) – only the year should be in parentheses. ✅
 * Philip Latham's Robinsonade Five Against Venus (1952) – is it really a story about the colonization of Venus? The source only describes it as a robinsonade (which should apparently not be capitalized, going by our article on the topic as well as SFE's), which to me would seem to indicate that it's not a story about colonizing Venus but rather being stranded on it.✅ That's an interesting argument. Isn't being stranded a failed colonization? Conversly, being stranted and prosperin, succesfull? I think if the sources mention this in this context, it's fine to keep it there, with a link to Robinsonade. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * As scientific knowledge of Venus advanced, so science fiction authors endeavored to keep pace – "so" should be removed for grammar. This is also an overly intricate way of phrasing it, and I don't know that it's really supported by the cited source. ✅ It's a bit poetic but I think it represents the source intention. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Looking back at it, I think it's an acceptable way of paraphrasing/summarizing the source's But as our knowledge of the planets has changed, the environments in the corresponding science-fiction stories have also changed. It is satisfyingly rare to find a science-fiction story written today that posits algae farms on the surface of Venus. (especially combined with another source saying As SF writers gradually came to terms with astronomical revelations about the utter inhospitability of the other planets in the solar system, the idea of effecting ecospheric metamorphoses inevitably became more important) in terms of content, but I stand by that it is an overly intricate way of putting it. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't think "conjecturing" is the right word. [1]
 * An early treatment of the concept is already found in – "already" is redundant to "early". [1]
 * Venus inhospit, ability – should use possessive and say "inhospitability". [1]
 * partial terraformed – partially. [1]
 * some works, for instance James E. Gunn's 1955 novella "The Naked Sky" (retitled "The Joy Ride") starts on a partial terraformed Venus where the colonists live underground to get away from the still-deadly atmosphere. – do several works start like this or only this one? It's an anacoluthon either way. ✅ Nuked during an earlier rewrite
 * Arthur C. Clarke's 1997 novel 3001: The Final Odyssey, for example – as an example of what? One would expect this to refer to something in the preceding sentence but it doesn't seem like it does. ✅ nuked
 * There are several instances of "terraforming of Venus" that should either be "the terraforming of Venus" or "terraforming Venus". ✅
 * One instance remains: Other enduring concepts include colonization and terraforming of Venus. – should be "include the colonization [...]". TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I fixed it. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Terraforming should be linked at the first occurrence (or second, if the first occurrence links to terraforming of Venus), not several occurrences later. ✅
 * The Venus Belt does not seem to be an example of Venus being terraformed, so it's out of place in this section. ✅ nuked
 * Given the findings [...] commercial exploitation. – unsourced and tagged accordingly. ✅ nuked
 * set against the background discuss the topic of terraforming – this is an anacoluthon and it's not entirely clear what is meant to be conveyed. ✅ rewritten
 * "into a more Earthlike world" is redundant to "terraforming" by definition. ✅
 * Other more recent works on this topic include – "more recent" seems a bit odd here, considering how the paragraph is structured. It's also a bit unclear what "this topic" refers to—is it terraforming Venus in general or something more specific? ✅
 * "The Snow of Venus" – I believe that should be "The Snows of Venus". ✅
 * featuring a rediscovered domed colony abandoned during a prior terraforming project has been described as paying homage to the "traditional" science-fictional Venus – I believe the homage in question is the fact that the dome contains a jungle. That also makes the placement of this questionable. ✅ moved up and clarified
 * has been described – WP:WTW. Attribute to the author or the work. ✅
 * Nordley's "Dawn Venus" (1995) already features a terraformed, Earth-like Venus. – already? ✅
 * the theme of terraforming Venus reflects both the scientific aspect of science fiction, particularly popular in hard science-fiction, but also – "both" is always followed by "and", never by "but also". The hyphen should be removed. I also don't think this is what the source is saying. fixed grammar, but I think this represents what the source is saying. How would you suggest to rephrase this further? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * I would remove the middle portion of the sentence, leaving [...] theme of terraforming Venus reflects a desire to recapture [...] TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I've added two refs for the middle part, i.e. terraforming of Venus in the context of hard sf. I'd prefer them to discus the connection more clearly, but I think this is what they meant. Please take a look when you have the time. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:57, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Since the sentence starts by saying that Gillett suggests this, citing the other sources ends up attributing what other people say to Gillett. Gillett doesn't really say that terraforming reflects the scientific aspect of science fiction. I also don't think that the suggested connection between terraforming Venus and hard science fiction is backed up by the additional sources. All told, I still think the middle portion of the sentence should be removed (leaving [...] theme of terraforming Venus reflects a desire to recapture [...]) along with the newly-added sources. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I removed the middle part of the sentence as I suggested. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The image of the floating outpost does not illustrate the colonisation of Venus in works of fiction particularly well, and doesn't really have a counterpart in the prose. I would suggest replacing it with an image of a terraformed Venus. ❌ I couldn't find a relevant better image to replace this with. Feel free to suggest one. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
 * There's always File:TerraformedVenus.jpg, at least. There may be better ones. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I will add it, but I don't think the article's image density is high enough we need to replace the floater image. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:51, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The image of the floating outpost works better now that it has something of a counterpart in the prose, but the connection between the image/caption and the prose needs to be strengthened. TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

I have updated my comments above and added strikethrough markup to the ones that have been satisfactorily resolved. I will return and make additional comments (and update the "summary" section below) later. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 4 June 2022 (UTC)


 * @TompaDompa Can you tell me which issues you consider as still in need of addressing? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 06:45, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

Section break
Indeed, I have been working on it. I have added strikethrough markup to some more comments that have since been resolved. Further comments:

Lead
 * See my previous comments about the image and its caption.
 * as it is very similar in size to Earth but closer to the Sun, as it is very similar in size to Earth but closer to the Sun, the planet was often depicted as warmer but still habitable by humans – this is not sourced and not covered in the body. That Venus is similar in size to Earth but closer to the Sun is the kind of basic information that need not be sourced unless challenged or appear in the body even if it appears in the WP:LEAD, but the assertion that this is the reason it has been portrayed in the way it has is the kind of WP:ANALYSIS that needs to come from the sources.
 * Didn't we already discuss the word habitable, used elsewhere, in the article, and didn't you agree it is fine? Per that discusion, I think it is an acceptable and uncontroversial summary in the lead. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:06, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
 * The issue is the cause-and-effect implication. Removing as it is very similar in size to Earth but closer to the Sun, would resolve this. TompaDompa (talk) 14:37, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't think cause-and-effect is wrong. It was depicted as warmed and habitable BECAUSE it was seen as similar to Earth, size-wise, but closer to the sun (and covered in clouds). Is my understanding wrong? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:30, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't know if it's wrong, but it's unsourced and the kind of WP:ANALYSIS that really needs to come from the sources. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Isn't this just a summary of referenced content from the article? That said, I can't right now pinpoint which sources were talking about "as it is very similar in size to Earth but closer to the Sun", so I have removed this sentence from the lead. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:23, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The lead is a bit short, not including anything about the oceanic vision of Venus, for instance.
 * Added mention of ocean to the lead. Also, expanded it with other major themes mentiond. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:06, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't know that listing a large number of writers is the best way to summarize this topic.
 * I think it is acceptable. Could list a few more prominent works too, I guess - any suggestions? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:06, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Early depictions: exotic tropics
 * I would link "early science fiction" to History of science fiction.
 * I would link "Mars" to Mars (it would also be appropriate to link it to Mars in fiction considering the context, but there is a link to Mars in fiction later and to avoid WP:EGG some rephrasing would probably be necessary, so it's easiest to just link to Mars) ✅ both
 * See my comments above about Eyraud.
 * I did and I am confused re how to change the text. Feel free to copyedit it so that the wording reflects what you think it should. I still find it fine. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:21, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I took a stab at rephrasing it. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It's A Narrative of the Travels and Adventures of Paul Aermont among the Planets, not Paul Aermont's A Narrative of the Travels and Adventures of Paul Aermont among the Planets
 * I fixed it. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Link To Venus in Five Seconds, The Blue Barbarians, The Radio Man, The Planet of Peril, The Lotus Eaters (Weinbaum), Parasite Planet, Logic of Empire, and The Black Star Passes. I would also link all the other mentioned works to create WP:REDLINKS (which goes for all sections, but I'll just mention it here) though that's not entirely necessary. ✅ for the blue ones, not sure if others are notable? Although I am not opposed to red links, either. I'll mull this later.--<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:21, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "The Lotus Eaters" is apparently a sequel to "Parasite Planet", so "Parasite Planet" should be mentioned first. ✅
 * Simak's "Hunger Death" is according to the cited source from 1938, not 1931. ✅
 * Many of such works – either "Many such works" or "Many of these works". Or even just "Many works". ✅
 * were recognized as part of the planetary romance or "sword-and-planet" genre – "were recognized as part of" is a rather roundabout way of phrasing it. ✅? (removed "recognized as")
 * dinosaur hunts – the cited source says nothing about hunting dinosaurs, though dinosaurs are mentioned.
 * Changed to encounters, since, obviously, they were encountered one way or another, if mentioned. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:21, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * More serious, solemn treatments included [...] – Most of the examples here—all but Last and First Men and Fury (more cerebral is close enough in this context)—fail verification. "The Black Star Passes", The World of Null-A, and the Seetee series are not mentioned at all by the cited source. Perelandra is not described in terms of how serious or solemn it is. Heinlein's works are likened to those by Burroughs, which is what they are meant to be contrasted against. The Space Merchants is described as a satire. Lucky Starr and the Oceans of Venus is described as a juvenile. It appears that you got these examples from Old Venus and forgot to cite that source in this spot, but that source only describes these works as "somewhat more mainline science fiction" which is not the same thing as more serious or solemn.
 * I've added citation to Old Venus and changed the wording to 'mainline'. I initially added this as "More serious, solemn treatments included Olaf Stapledon’s Last and First Men (1930 ) and Henry Kuttner's Fury (1947).(ref is Greenwood : 860) " and expanded it later. Do you think we can keep 'serious, solemn' for those two works, or not? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:21, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "More serious" is definitely okay when the source uses "more cerebral". "Solemn" is much more dubious since it has pretty strong connotations of sadness (or at least somberness) which "cerebral" doesn't. TompaDompa (talk) 14:37, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Changed mainline to serious. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:03, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Then we're back at the problem of calling several works "serious" when the source uses "mainline"—not the same thing. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa But you yourself said above "more serious is definitely ok". What is mainline anyway? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:25, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "More serious" is okay for Last and First Men and Fury since the source uses "more cerebral" for those works, but not for the rest of the works for which the source uses "somewhat more mainline". Sorry for the confusion. I interpret "mainline" to mean basically the same as "mainstream", though there may be some other meaning intended by the author. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa So what is mainstream here? Still not a term that is very clear. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:03, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I agree it's not entirely clear. That's a reason not to replace the source's phrasing with some other phrasing, lest we unintentionally change the meaning. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I took another stab at rewording this. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 08:19, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It now says Treatments described sometimes as more "solemn" or "mainline" included [...]. The sources don't say "solemn". Gillett says "cerebral". TompaDompa (talk) 14:09, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Ah. Right. Fixed. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 05:47, 22 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Heinlein's ("Logic of Empire", 1941 and later works) – should be Heinlein's "Logic of Empire" (1941) and later works, no? See above, however. ✅
 * Kuttner's Fury is variously identified as being from 1947 and 1950. . 1947 marks serializaiton in magazine, 1950 is the book version. Go with 1947? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:21, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * My approach has generally been to use the earlier (magazine) date, yes. TompaDompa (talk) 14:37, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Fixing for this and similar cases accordingly <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:03, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * 1949-1951 – should be 1949–1951 with an MOS:ENDASH. See above, however. ✅
 * Pohl and Kornbluth's The Space Merchants is variously identified as being from 1953 and 1952.  same as above, 1952 magazine, 1953 book. Go with 1952? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:29, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Many early portrayals of Venus suggest the planet's lifeforms and scenery, [...] – suggest? Is part of the sentence missing here, perhaps something along the lines of "to be [...]"? ✅, changed order, added "hotter". --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:29, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * with the added twist that, as Venus orbits closer than Earth to the Sun, it may resemble a younger version of Earth – it should be clarified that this was based on the prevailing version of the nebular hypothesis of Solar System formation at the time and not just something the authors came up with themselves, and that clarification should link to the relevant Wikipedia articles. If you want an example of this, I wrote about the same thing over at Mars in fiction. ✅ I've added the link, we discuss it in detail earlier in this section. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:29, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The current version Influenced by then-prevailing scientific views, many early portrayals of Venus suggest the planet's lifeforms and scenery may resemble a younger version of Earth, with the added twist that, as Venus orbits closer than Earth to the Sun, it is hotter. mixes a few things up and ends up kind of missing the point as a result. Per the sources, the reason it was inferred that Venus was hotter was the permanent cloud cover rather than its proximity to the Sun, and the reason it was suspected to resemble a younger version of the Earth was that the planets were then believed to have formed sequentially according to distance from the Sun. TompaDompa (talk) 14:37, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Hmm. Copyedited the paragraph. I don't recall any sources talking about the sequential formation? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:09, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy says Based on the old Laplacian theory that the relative age of planets increased outward, it was a short step to seeing Venus as an image of a younger Earth [...] (p. 860). TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa How do you think we can add it to the article? If at all? Maybe follow "Influenced by then-prevailing scientific views" with a link to, or just blue link "then-prevailing" to Nebular_hypothesis? I don't think we have a dedicated article for Laplace's theory yet. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:28, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I linked to History of Solar System formation and evolution hypotheses over at Mars in fiction. "Influenced by then-prevailing scientific views" could be followed by "about the relative ages of the planets". You could also just copy "Because early versions of the nebular hypothesis of Solar System formation held that the planets were formed sequentially starting at the outermost planets" from Mars in fiction as long as you note that you have done so per WP:CWW. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I've added the first version (followed by). <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:05, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The quote by Sagan should link to Mercury in fiction and Mars in fiction. ✅ On a sidenote, I think Martian canals are notable and warrant an article... may write one one of these days if nobody beats me to it. Wait, we have Martian canal, linking there instead, seems better (or should it be Martian_canal? It's a bit weird that the main article is not about the fiction, reminds a bit of the self-replicating machines case...). But, errr, help me, canal-infested sounds weird, what to use instead of 'infested'? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:29, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The Martian canals were not originally or primarily a science-fictional concept. There was real controversy in the astronomical community about whether they existed. Some of the sources cited in the Mars in fiction article go into quite a bit of detail about that (Crossley's Imagining Mars: A Literary History and Markley's Dying Planet: Mars in Science and the Imagination in particular, Hotakainen's Mars: From Myth and Mystery to Recent Discoveries to a lesser extent) if you're interested. I think linking to Mars in fiction is more appropriate than linking to Martian canal, because what Sagan is talking about is really the science-fictional depictions. I agree that "canal-infested" is a kind of odd phrasing, but it is a direct quote (and clearly marked as such). TompaDompa (talk) 14:37, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Done <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:10, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Jungle and swamp
 * A better image may be this one (depicting one of Burroughs' stories) or one of these two (photographs of jungles). For images with dinosaurs (or similar), there are a lot to browse through at Commons:Category:Dinosauria life restorations, Commons:Category:Paintings of extinct animals, and Commons:Category:Paleoart. Another option would be to just use an illustration of Carboniferous life such as this one (see Commons: Category:Carboniferous for more).
 * Does the story in that volume relates to Venus? If so, it would indeed be better. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, it's "The Living Dead" from Escape on Venus. See Edgar Rice Burroughs bibliography. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Another upside of using File:Fantastic adventures 194111.jpg is that it would look rather good as a DYK image, in my opinion. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Thank you for showing the connection. I've added it, but the image doesn't seem to be relevant to "jungle or swamp", so for now I've added it above, as it seems to illustrate the sentence "various adventures, from swordfights and dinosaur encounters to romances with alien princesses.". Arguably, it is switchable with the damsel attacked by ant monster cover we have below. Feel free to move them around and adjust the caption, but I'll still defend the current jungle ruins image as the most fitting for that section, as it illustrates a "jungle on a alien planet". <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:10, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I have WP:BOLDLY condensed the Arrhenius content, as you suggested.
 * Thank you. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * D'Ammassa's Encyclopedia of Science Fiction can be read at https://archive.org/details/encyclopediaofsc0000damm/page/64/mode/2up and that link should replace the Google Books one.
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Link The Green Hills of Earth (this seems to be about the short story, and not The Green Hills of Earth (short story collection)).
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * a habitable planet with incessant. – missing word, presumably "rain".
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The stuff about Perry Rhodan should inform the reader of when it was written (at least that the series started in 1961, optionally something about how long it has been going on since).
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Ocean
 * Others envisioned Venus as similar to Panthalassa (All-Ocean), with perhaps a few islands. – see my comments above about why I don't think this is appropriate. I would suggest leaving out the word "Panthalassa" altogether and write something along the lines of "Others envisioned Venus as having a planet-wide ocean, with perhaps a few islands." or "Others envisioned Venus as being covered by ocean, with perhaps a few islands."
 * I think we can both have the cake and eat it. Your explanation of the term is helpful and I have added it, but I also retained the linked term, making it clear it's just a comparison. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The problem then becomes that (resembling Earth's Panthalassa) is a comparison made by Wikipedia, but none of the sources (they speak of a panthalassa with a lowecase "p" rather than of Panthalassa with an uppercase "P"). Also, envisioned Venus as similar to planet-wide ocean should be "envisioned Venus as having a planet-wide ocean". TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa In my view, the difference of lower and upper case is just a MoS issue, while the concept it the same. IMHO linking the term is informative to the reader, and not confusing. If you still disagree, we can ask for a WP:3O. Fixed similar/having. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:30, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Lowercase "panthalassa" is a generic term meaning "all-ocean", while uppercase "Panthalassa" is the specific historical superocean that surrounded the supercontinent Pangaea. The issue is that the sources do not refer to the specific superocean that existed on Earth but rather the general concept of a planet-wide ocean. That's not just a MoS issue, it's a difference in meaning. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Which is why we are now saying, in-text, that the concept was "resembling Earth's Panthalassa". What's the problem? The term is used by the sources, and is informative for the reader. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:12, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The comparison to Earth's Panthalassa is original to Wikipedia, it's not from the sources. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Ah. That needs fixing. And fixed - found a nice reference (the text does mention Wikipedia, so if the author was inspired by our article here, well, WP:CITOGENESIS, but it's reliable otherwise, expert-written, etc.). Btw, I've added a new sentence to the 'beasts'. Do let me know if vociferous sounds good, or maybe ravenous. Source is here, . Discusses Mars a page earlier in case it is useful for your work on that. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 08:33, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * That source does indeed use uppercase "Panthalassa", but it isn't actually talking about Earth's Panthalassa—it's using Panthalassa as a noun ("a planet-wide ocean, a Panthalassa"). The reference to Earth's Panthalassa should be removed."Vociferous" is a bit weird in context. Did you mean "voracious"? One of the inspirations for portraying Venus as home to a vociferous ecosystem was Weinbaum's "Parasite Planet" (1935). is also not really what the source says. It says that Asimov was inspired by Weinbaum's Venusian ecosystems, though I think it would be better to just write about Weinbaum's ecosystems on their own merits. TompaDompa (talk) 14:09, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Olaf Stapledon’s 1930 science fiction novel – I think science fiction goes without saying.
 * Right. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Last and First Men has already been linked in a previous section.
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The stuff about Last and First Men should be condensed to something like "future descendants of humanity are modified to be adapted to life on an ocean-covered Venus" with a link to pantropy somewhere, and the Maslen citation should be removed and replaced by Stableford p. 548 and Westfahl p. 672.
 * Lewis's Perelandra, (1943) – stray comma.
 * Done.--<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Link Sister Planet.
 * Done.--<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:50, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * called in The Encyclopedia of Science Fiction "the most enduring pulp image" of an oceanic Venus – this is said not only of "Clash by Night", but of "Clash by Night" and its sequel Fury in combination. Since The Jungle is only a sequel to the former, the sentence needs to be rephrased somewhat (perhaps easiest to split it in two).
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The text now incorrectly says that "Clash by Night" and The Jungle, rather than "Clash by Night" and Fury, was called "the most enduring pulp image" of this kind. There is also a stray comma—oceanic Venus,. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Ah. Nice catch. Fixed. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:34, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The text now incorrectly says that The Jungle was a sequel to both "Clash by Night" and Fury, rather than just to "Clash by Night". TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Considering the age, it's logically a sequel to both. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:12, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * But I attempted to clarify it anyway. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:14, 17 July 2022 (UTC)

Desert
 * In 1922 Charles Edward St. John and Seth B. Nicholson, failing to detect the spectroscopic signs of oxygen or water in the atmosphere, proposed a dusty, windy, desert Venus – This goes a fair bit beyond what the sources say. What St. John and Nicholson proposed, according to the sources, was that the atmosphere (more specifically the upper layer they could observe) had at most minimal amounts of water vapor (and oxygen, not that it's really relevant) and that the clouds could be dust clouds—but also regular water vapor clouds under conditions that could create clouds with water vapor levels below the threshold of detection by their instruments. The actual surface of the planet being desertic is a different matter altogether. I would remove this.
 * Reworded to be more true to the source, I think it is still relevant. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The current phrasing—In 1922 observations by Charles Edward St. John and Seth B. Nicholson failing to detect the spectroscopic signs of oxygen or water in the upper atmosphere, paved a way for the discussions of a dusty, windy, desert Venus—also goes a fair bit beyond what the cited sources say. What Launius says is By the 1930s the detection of carbon dioxide in its thick atmosphere forced scientists grudgingly to abandon the idea that Venus contained a carboniferous swamp. The scientists investigating Venus replaced the pre-Cambrian environment, as Carl Sagan noted in 1961, for "an arid planetary desert, overlain by clouds of dust from the wind-swept surface". They continued to search for water vapor, but failed to find it. What scientists found was carbon dioxide, a lot of it; a layer of gas roughly equivalent to a two mile deep ocean at a pressure similar to that of Earth. (and going back to Sagan's 1961 article, what it says is After many unsuccessful spectroscopic attempts to discover water vapor in the Cytherean atmosphere, the hypothetical Carboniferous swamp was generally abandoned, to be replaced by an arid planetary desert, overlain by clouds of dust from the wind-swept surface.). The heavy emphasis on St. John and Nicholson in the history of the idea that Venus might be a desert planet is not really justified by the cited sources. And this is after all mining sources on a different topic (Venus itself) when the article should be based on sources on Venus in fiction. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * We could remove links to " by Charles Edward St. John and Seth B. Nicholson ". But the rest of the content seems relevant. The desert variant was based on some scientific theories, and we should discuss is origin, as supported by sources you cite. But perhaps you can suggest a more elegant and true-to-the-sources way to do it? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:36, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I would probably stick to just saying that the idea of Venus having abundant water was controversial while only citing Gillett. Going by the sources, the desert vision of Venus is a rather minor aspect of the topic of Venus in fiction. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I am at a loss how to change this section. Can you edit it directly? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:15, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It's Rupert Wildt, not Rubert.
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * discussed how a greenhouse effect might result in a similar outcome – the outcome here is hot, not dry as one might reasonably infer. This should be clarified (it could also be removed; it's not essential).
 * Changed to hot. Note that if we remove this paragraph the section looks very short. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The source describes Venus in The Big Rain as hot (and poisonous), but not dry, so either an additional source should be located or this example removed.
 * Added a source (Pournelle, Jerry (1979). A Step Father Out). Found on Z-library. It has a 10 page long discussion of terraformation of deserified Venus in sf context; also used it to expand the article a bit (sadly, I couldn't figure a way to use something from it to expand this particular section, do let me know if you have an idea here). --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * It's A Step Farther Out. Google Books has a typo in the title. I also don't see how this verifies Venus in "The Big Rain" (which is apparently a novelette and should be in "quotation marks" rather than italics) being dry? TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Nevermind, found this source when looking for something else. TompaDompa (talk) 00:44, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The Fury from Earth is according to the cited source from 1963, not 1964.
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Other
 * Already in 1909 Serviss' A Columbus of Space (1909) depicted – I don't see a reason to say "Already" when this is not contrasted with anything later, and the year should only be mentioned once.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The year is still mentioned twice. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Fixed. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:58, 15 July 2022 (UTC)


 * and the other half, in perpetual darkness – remove the comma.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Stephen L. Gillet – it's "Gillett". This error appears a number of times (including in the reference).
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Later depictions: hostile inferno
 * After the onset [...] understood. – This is a very long sentence (with no fewer than six commas) that should be condensed for brevity and split into shorter sentences for readability.
 * Split. Not fond of condensing. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * writers interest – should be "writers' interest".
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * (Although the designs for the Soviet Venera probes still considered the possibility of a water landing as late as 1964). – this comes off as rather an afterthought, and it's not really relevant to fictional depictions of Venus. I would just remove it.
 * Right. Moved to Venera article. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * The theme of Earth-like, warm Venus – Editorializing. I would replace it with something like "Earlier visions of Venus" (in which case the later "resurfaces" needs to be replaced with "resurface" to match the plural form).
 * I don't see how this is WP:EDITORIALIZING? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Call it WP:INTERPRETATION, then. The point is that Earth-like, warm Venus isn't what the sources say. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Stableford says "nostalgic farewells to Venerean Romanticism" and the other source is very similar. In either case, what is the "earlier visions of Venus"? The sources do discuss them. Venerean Romanticism etc. refers "Old Venus", few pages down, talks about "stories set in the kind of nostalgic, habitable Venus found in the works of writers like...". "Habitable Venus" is the "Earth-like, warm Venus" discussed under the 'jungle/swamp, ocean and desert' chapters. This is not interpretation, this is commons sense. Anyway, for now I've added the adjective 'nostalgic', since both sources use it. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 16:07, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Habitable" would be fine ("romantic" could also work, but then I think the sentence might need to be rephrased). The sentence now starts The nostalgic theme of Earth-like, warm Venus occasionally resurfaces in deliberately nostalgic "retro-sf", with "nostalgic" used twice. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I removed one of the double nostalgic. I don't see the need to change the other wording. Space station can be habitable, but is not Earth-like, so I feel the current wording is superior. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:17, 17 July 2022 (UTC)


 * "retro-sf" does not seem like the right term here. I would just replace it with "stories" or "works".
 * The source(s) do use the term retro-sf, it's just that the current pipe is not exactly correct. I think we miss the article on this. I changed link to just retro style. We could instaed change it to a WP:RED link to retro-sf, the concept is likely notable. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Linking to retro style resolves part of the problem. The cited sources only describe "The Doors of His Face, the Lamps of His Mouth" as retro (the other works are described as nostalgic, however), and that's as a free-standing adjective rather than as part of the phrase "retro-sf". Writing "nostalgic and retro works" would be fine. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:18, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The term "retro-sf" remains in the article (here and in the WP:LEAD), but isn't used by the sources. It would seem to imply a subgenre or movement (like hard science fiction). Using "retro" as an adjective is fine, but this is going beyond the sources. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I don't think I'd add such a term without a source. Are you sure it isn't in any source cited? Gardner uses the expression "deliberately retro". Old Venus is also described as "retro sf" in another anthology here. Do you think we need to reference it better? Or just change to retro style? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 08:58, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The term "retro-sf" was present in the article before you started editing it (see e.g. this 2017 version), so maybe that explains it? I would just write "nostalgic and retro works". TompaDompa (talk) 14:09, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I changed it from deliberately nostalgic and "retro-sf" works to deliberately nostalgic and retro works in the body and from revisited in retro-sf stories to revisited in intentionally retro stories in the WP:LEAD. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Link The Doors of His Face, The Lamps of His Mouth, Old Venus, and Venus (novel).
 * Done. I can't believe how many I missed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * works collected in dedicated anthologies – it should be clarified that Farewell Fantastic Venus is an anthology of older works (when this vision of Venus was not obsolete) whereas Old Venus is an anthology of newer works in the style of those older works.
 * Any idea how to do it while not going beyond what the sources say? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Return to Venusport" (which is already cited for this sentence) calls Farewell Fantastic Venus a "retrospective anthology", and describes how Old Venus was constructed by soliciting authors for "stories set in the kind of nostalgic, habitable Venus in works by writers [...] before the hard facts gathered by space probes blew those dreams away". The Encyclopedia of Science Fiction calls the former a "theme anthology" and the latter an "original anthology", so you could cite that as well. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I've added short descriptions. I am not sure how to clarify further without OR, given the sparse description of the former. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 07:15, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The article now incorrectly calls Old Venus a retrospective anthology. I would clarify it by saying that Farewell Fantastic Venus is an anthology of older works (verifiable from this source among others, though I'm fairly certain that the SFE description of it as a "retrospective anthology" also means that it is an anthology of older works) and that Old Venus is an anthology of newly-written works in the style of older stories about the now-outdated vision of Venus (verifiable from "Return to Venusport", as noted above). TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I've copied your wording to the article, and added the ref to the new source you found. Feel free to adjust the wording directly if you deem it necessary. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:21, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * WP:REDLINK Bob Buckley here (at first mention) rather than in a later section.
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Bova's Venus is variously identified as being from 2001 and 2000.
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "The Sultan of the Clouds" appears to be a short story rather than a novel, so it should have quotes rather than italics.
 * Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The last paragraph would read a lot better if, instead of listing themes and works separately, it made it clear which works are examples of what.
 * I am afraid it's too hard to tell which source would support which description. But if you think you can untangle it, go ahead. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Other enduring concepts include colonization and terraforming of Venus. – these link to the Venus-specific articles, which is fine in itself. The "Colonization" section then again links to colonization of Venus while the "Terraforming" section links to the broader terraforming article. There are thus two links to colonization of Venus and none to the broader space colonization article. This should be done consistently: either (1) change it so the "Colonization" section links to space colonization or (2) change the quoted passage to link to the broader space colonization and terraforming articles and the "Terraforming" section to link to terraforming of Venus. I have a slight preference for the latter, but either option works.
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Colonization
 * was penned – suggest "appeared".
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * It should be noted that "The Last Judgment" is an essay, rather than a short story as might be expected.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * The first Stableford citation in this section should be page 548 (or at least 547–548), not 547.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Kornbluth has already been linked in a previous section (as Cyril M. Kornbluth).
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Stick to either "Cyril M. Kornbluth" or "C. M. Kornbluth" (or just "Kornbluth", as appropriate) for consistency. I suggest the former, as that's the title of the article here on Wikipedia.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Frederik Pohl's and C. M. Kornbluth's The Space Merchants (1952) and Pohl's The Merchants' War (1984) – add "sequel" before the second title.
 * Ok. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Link Five Against Venus (but see below).
 * From what I can gather, Five Against Venus is not a story of failed colonization but of an unintentional crash landing. It should at minimum be mentioned separately and noted as a variation on the theme. Per Westfahl p. 672, Niven's "Becalmed in Hell" is also a story of being accidentally stranded on Venus, so it might be most appropriate to mention these two stories together (but that would take some restructuring since Five Against Venus doesn't belong where "Becalmed in Hell" is currently mentioned chronologically).
 * I am not sure how to do this. mentions Five as a colonization story. Does any source say that it is also a story of surviving an accident? Becalmed in Hell is already described as such. If We have a source for Five in the context of survival, then it could be added as a mention to the preceeding section ("exploration of, and survival in, the hostile environment of Venus, as pictured in"). --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * This review says The whole family takes off for the moon when Papa Robinson is offered a job on that fast developing satellite. But the ship goes haywire, spins out of control and crashes on Venus. Faced by weird Venusian horrors, the family really battles for existence on a wild and barbaric planet. SFE doesn't really call it a colonization story, it's just mentioned in a separate sentence in a paragraph that discusses colonization stories. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I think you are right it is a stretch to call ita colonization story. I moved the mention of it to an earlier section (it doesn't fit in the survival in hostile inferno and it still portrays Venus as rather habitable/Earth-like, just "wild"). <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  07:22, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Marta Randall's "Big Dome" (1985), featuring a rediscovered domed colony abandoned during a prior terraforming project, whose jungle-like setting has been described [...] – anacoluthon. Removing the first comma and replacing "featuring" with "features" would solve this, though it might flow better if the sentence were more substantially rewritten.
 * Done, I hope. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Terraforming
 * Seed's A Companion to Science Fiction can be read at https://books.google.com/books?id=PiphRocVYRwC&pg=PA134 and that link should be included in the reference.
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * It is not clear why the examples of terraforming are organized as they are across several sentences and two paragraphs. Last and First Men is mentioned separately as an early work and "Dawn Venus" as one where the terraforming has already been completed (though that also appears to be true of Shadows of the White Sun), which makes some sense, but why are the other seven examples grouped as they are?
 * Reorganized them chronologically as examples mentioned in RS, without any deeper discussion, sadly. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * See my comments above about the last paragraph.

Lifeforms
 * See my comments above about the image.
 * I'd rather not include an arbitrary image of a real dinosaur. There's probably some book cover or such we an use eventually as copyright expire. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Right. The comment I was referring to was The image of the cover of An Earth Man on Venus needs a caption that makes it clear what it is meant to illustrate (presumably something about the kinds of lifeforms that are found on Venus in fictional works?) or else be removed. TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Caption expanded. It's supposed to illustrate the "exotic Venusian life" discussed under beats. I like the image of insect-tiger more but it doesn't mention Venus in text, so it could be illustrating adventures on Mars or elsewhere... this one is more clear. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 07:50, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
 * 1950 Avon comic-book adaptation of The Radio Man, titled An Earth Man on Venus, featuring the damsel-in-distress assaulted by exotic Venusian life, here, a gigantic ant. needs copyediting for readability. I would also remove the reference to the damsel in distress trope. TompaDompa (talk) 02:42, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Could you copyedit it for readability to suit your liking? It reads fine to me. TIA. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 12:22, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. TompaDompa (talk) 00:07, 21 July 2022 (UTC)

Beasts
 * Pope has been linked in a previous section (albeit with his middle initial included).
 * Either include Pope's middle initial for consistency or just use the surname.
 * Done and done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)


 * revolves around an encounter – fairly strong statement when the cited source only says that the story describes the encounter. Citing Westfahl p. 672, which says that the story is essentially a retelling of Hemingway's The Old Man and the Sea, would in my opinion resolve this.
 * Done. Minor issue here. GBooks says it's two volumes. Do we know which volume are we citing here? Is this a GBook error? The book's cover doesn't say anything about it being volume 1 or 2. Worldcat says "1 online resource (2 volumes)". Can you figure out what's going on here? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't know. Could it perhaps be the case that it's two volumes in print form (as is sometimes done with lengthy reference works) but only one as an eBook? TompaDompa (talk) 23:54, 14 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Right. I'll remove [2 volumes] from the citation as it's does not seem to be the "official" part of the title. Could be one book with one ISBN split into two volumes, I guess. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 07:51, 16 July 2022 (UTC)


 * depictions of life on Venus became more nuanced – I don't think "nuanced" is the right word here. I would perhaps describe the first two examples as "exotic", "outlandish", or even "alien" (the source doesn't use any of these words or put it in similar terms—it only prefaces the examples by saying that The desire to find life remains strong—but I think it's fair to describe them thusly anyway) and say that depictions of on Venus ranged from those to the more mundane cloud-borne microbes.
 * Fair point. Changed to exotic. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

Venusians
 * 1887-1893 – should be 1887–1893 with an MOS:ENDASH.
 * Done. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:29, 13 July 2022 (UTC)

TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

Another section break
I have taken the liberty of addressing some of these issues myself. These issues still need to be resolved:

In general:
 * Missing aspects:
 * Movie depictions. The Encyclopedia of Science Fiction devotes a paragraph to this.
 * Comic books. Science Fiction Literature through History: An Encyclopedia goes into some detail about this.
 * It's not entirely necessary to meet the WP:Good article criteria, but I would strongly suggest either reducing the number of examples or elaborating on the details of individual examples anywhere more than (say) three examples are listed. We're supposed to summarize, not enumerate.


 * Nice finds. New section media summarizes, or rewords, those contents. Wish there was at least one more source for each to make it less of a derivative. It's nice that we can mention Lem, it's still is way too little as for globalizing this, but well, sources are sources. For example, a big missing aspect to me is treatment in non-American fiction. Maurice Leblanc's fr:Les Trois Yeux (wikisource:The Three Eyes), for example, seems like a classic.
 * None of the sources cited seem to mention Vogt's A Can of Paint. For whatever reason, when translated to Polish, the title was changed to "Venusian Crystal Cube", and then adapted as the title of one of the first anthologies of Western sf published in Poland (pl:Kryształowy sześcian Wenus).
 * Then there's the entire "Venus in anime". Not a major theme, but still, there is Venus Wars, or the Waltz for Venus episode of Cowboy Bebop. And as for the films, which is of course incomplete (Voyage to the Prehistoric Planet, Voyage to the Planet of Prehistoric Women, etc.), we could also use a section on television (The Expanse, for example). And games. Category:Video games set on Venus, plus board games too (terrafoming Venus is featured in Venus Next expansion of Terraforming Mars, classic Venus is the theme of Onward to Venus )...
 * So yeah, there's a ton to write, the problem is OR. What's your take on mentioning such stuff when they are not covered by overiews of Venus in fition, just in stuff like a review of a particular work? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:01, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I take a fairly conservative approach to what goes in the article. Aspects that are not covered by overview articles I interpret as being WP:MINORASPECTS that it would be inappropriate to cover. Examples should also ideally come from overview articles, though using other sources to elaborate on their details is fine (not the works themselves though—secondary or tertiary sources); I often use SFE overview articles to decide on including an example and then use the SFE article on the author to be able to add a bit more detail about the work in question, for instance. Occasionally it may be appropriate to use examples from other sources to get a more well-rounded set of examples for the article as a whole, but that needs to be done with care. I sometimes take a look at what SFE articles link to the overview article (found by clicking "About This Entry" at the top, leading to e.g. https://sf-encyclopedia.com/incoming.php?entry=venus) to find additional examples.A way to make it less derivative that I often use is interspersing the examples throughout the text as appropriate rather than devoting a separate section/paragraph to the specific medium. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa I hear you. That said, it's sad that we have to compromise. I respect OR, but IMHO the entries in SF encyclopedia and like are generally obsolete (mostly pre-21st century) and miss important modern developments. Further, they are suffering from major US-centric or at least English-centric bias, which can be summed up as "wait, what, there is literature/stuff written not in English"? Maybe I should look for some Polish-language sources discussion of Venus in sf... hmmm. (Not that it would cover German, Spanish, Chinese or Japanese sf... sigh). The Balkanization of such things by language lines is a major problem. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:49, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I just noticed that Venus Wars and Cowboy Bebop are both mentioned in Wanderer am Himmel: Die Welt der Planeten in Astronomie und Mythologie, as are the role-playing games Space: 1889, Mutant Chronicles, Eclipse Phase, and Transhuman Space. This source also (briefly) uses the term retro science fiction (Heutzutage finden sich Saurier und Amazonen nur noch in erklärter Retro-Science-Fiction). TompaDompa (talk) 02:13, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa As I don't read German, and Google Books are not, to my knowledge, translatable, can I ask you to use this source to expands text, assuming you read German? If not, perhaps we can ask Daranios, who I think does. (I am looking at Polish sources but not finding much except about the Soviet Planet Bur). <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 07:05, 26 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I expanded it slightly. TompaDompa (talk) 04:32, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

Early depictions: exotic tropics
 * A number of the earliest descriptions painted Venus as a beautiful paradisiac planet, a view that was only in time modified by scientific findings. – the second half of this sentence is not really supported by the cited source. It's also something of a non sequitur with the following sentence (As observed by Carl Sagan in 1978: "A clement twilight zone on a synchronously rotating Mercury, a swamp-and-jungle Venus, and a canal-infested Mars, while all classic science-fiction devices, are all, in fact, based upon earlier misapprehensions by planetary scientists.") since the paradise-like Venus and the swamp-and-jungle Venus are not the same.
 * Added the word primodial and a ref that should cover all aspects. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

Jungle and swamp
 * I stand by what I said before about the image of the ruins in the alien jungle not being appropriate as it doesn't primarily look like the jungles of Venus (per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE) but rather the ruins of a civilization. There are a few different alternatives here. One is to move the image depicting Burroughs' "The Living Dead" to this section (it is after all one of the sequels to Pirates of Venus mentioned in the text, and it showcases the exotic flora and fauna). Another is to use an image of a jungle on Earth such as one of these two (both photographs—paintings or other types of illustrations could also work). Another is to use an image with one or more dinosaurs (or similar)—there are a lot to browse through at Commons:Category:Dinosauria life restorations, Commons:Category:Paintings of extinct animals, and Commons:Category:Paleoart. Yet another is to just use an illustration of Carboniferous life such as this one, this one, or this one/alternative version (see Commons:Category:Carboniferous paleoecology and the broader Commons:Category:Carboniferous for more). Finally, the section does not necessarily need to have any image at all, so the current image could simply be removed without adding a replacement.
 * Since we have been rehashing this for ages, I think we need a WP:3O. How about we pick someone like Daranios to make the call? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Sure. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Ping User:Daranios. Mind taking a look at this minor issue and making the call? :) <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:44, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Wow, you have been busy at this, great work. I might not be the best person to make this call, knowing very little fiction based on Venus myself. Simply based on the text in the article I would agree with and remove the image: The ruins look decidedly Asian- rather than alien-themed to me, so I don't think the image gives a good impression. Daranios (talk) 16:02, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * @Daranios We are a bit too "involved", hence we are calling for an independent reviewer for those (minor) issues. Ok, remove - that's actually agreeing with not me but TD. But ok, 2:1, that's what I asked for, I'll take my loss. No objections to anyone removing this image, I'll not restore it. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 16:04, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * PS. CF for "ruins" to see older discussion above. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:45, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * PPS. We could also use a 3O on whether mentioning the term Panthalassa is ok or not. Again, CTRL+F for this term is best. TIA <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:46, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Several of Weinbaum's short stories from the 1930s are set in Venusian jungles. – The source says In the 1930s, Stanley G. Weinbaum set several classic short stories on a tropical Venus. Tropical ≠ jungles. I would just remove this and write about Weinbaum's depictions of life on the planet in the appropriate section instead, since that's what the sources focus on (depictions of extraterrestrial life is also what Weinbaum is perhaps most known for).
 * Changing jungles to tropics seems like a simpler solution? (Done) --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

Ocean
 * (resembling Earth's Panthalassa) – As discussed above, the sources that use the term "panthalassa" aren't talking about Earth's Panthalassa but the general concept of a planet-wide ocean (even the source that uses a capital P), so this should be removed. Earth's Panthalassa wasn't even a planet-wide ocean—it covered about as much of the planet's surface as our current World Ocean does, it was just a different shape.
 * I assume you looked at the source found and added? Doesn't it suffice for linking of Panthalassa in this context? That said, I'd like to add a link to Ocean world. Do you think some of our sources support linking that or do we need to find something new? --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I did look at that source, yes. And no, it doesn't (see my comments above). Linking to Ocean world is perfectly fine—the main reason I haven't suggested it is that Earth technically counts as one. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

Later depictions: hostile inferno
 * The theme of Earth-like, warm Venus occasionally resurfaces – "Earth-like, warm" isn't really supported by the sources. Describing it as "habitable" would work, as would describing it as a "romantic", "earlier", or "pre-Mariner" vision of Venus.
 * Changed to "The theme of habitable, romantic, pre-Mariner Venus occasionally resurfaces". Although I don't think that Earth-like is OR, it's implied by numerous sources, and I think we should 3O this too.--<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

Beasts
 * The image of the floating outpost works now that it has something of a counterpart in the prose, but the connection between the image/caption and the prose needs to be strengthened.
 * If you have an idea how to strneghten it without being ORish, please go ahead. I am having trouble with that. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I took a stab at it. Please check that I got the page number correct, since I can't tell from Google Books. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * One of the inspirations for portraying Venus as home to a vociferous ecosystem was Weinbaum's "Parasite Planet" (1935). – "vociferous" is a bit weird in context. Did you mean "voracious"?
 * Indeed. Fixed. --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)


 * One of the inspirations for portraying Venus as home to a vociferous ecosystem was Weinbaum's "Parasite Planet" (1935). – not really what the source says. It says that Asimov was inspired by Weinbaum's Venusian ecosystems, though I think it would be better to just write about Weinbaum's portrayals of Venusian life on their own merits.
 * I don't see the difference. The inspiration part is relevant as the source says, IMHO, that Weinbaum's vision proved enduring, so it's not just that it needs desribing, but it needs to be shown as significant (influencing later works). --<sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:27, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I rephrased it to Weinbaum portrayed Venus as home to a voracious ecosystem in "Parasite Planet" (1935), and his ecosystems in that story and others inspired other authors such as Asimov. to better reflect what the source says. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

I will re-assess the WP:LEAD once the body is in satisfactory shape. TompaDompa (talk) 02:49, 23 July 2022 (UTC)

Lead On the whole, this is getting fairly close to WP:Good article quality. TompaDompa (talk) 16:39, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
 * In general, the lead is a bit brief. To a large extent, this is a result of covering multiple aspects in the same sentence. It would almost certainly read a lot better if each aspect got more "space", so-to-speak. There is definitely room for more details.
 * the planet was often depicted as warmer but still habitable by humans. – warmer than Earth, presumably.
 * Depictions of Venus as a lush, verdant paradise, an oceanic planet, or fetid swampland, often inhabited by dinosaur-like monsters, became common in early pulp science fiction, particularly between the 1930s and 1950s, when science had revealed some aspects of Venus but not yet the harsh nature of its surface conditions. – this needs copyediting for readability. It would probably be best to split it into shorter sentences.
 * Overall, Venus was considered to have much less of an established setting than its sister planet, Mars. – "considered" is a MOS:Word to watch. Either attribute this, or rephrase it. I would suggest the latter (it is unattributed in the body—The absence of a common vision of Venus resulted in the less coherent mythology of Venus, particularly compared with the image of Mars in fiction.).
 * From the mid-20th century on, as the reality of Venus as a hostile, toxic inferno became known, the early tropes of adventures in Venusian tropics gave way to more realistic stories of the planet's colonization and terraforming, although the vision of tropical Venus is occasionally revisited in intentionally retro stories. – this is also a sentence that should probably be split into shorter sentences (not least because it's a single-sentence paragraph).
 * If you devote a separate section of the article to film and comic book depictions, this aspect needs to be covered in the lead. If you instead intersperse film and comic book examples in the article, it's not necessary.
 * I don't think that listing a large number of writers is a good way to summarize this topic. It puts an overly large amount on emphasis on the "who" (rather than the "what", "how", "when", and "why"). The selection of writers and their description as "early major writers of science fiction" is also a bit dubious.


 * @TompaDompa I've c/e lead. I couldn't figure out a way to mention comic books there (I think they are fairly unimportant). I am not sure how to rewrite the paragraph enumerating writers. AS before, you are welcome to try your hand at changing this, I am having the "writers block" issues moving beyond some of my wording. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 15:57, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I've done some further copyediting of the lead. As a further improvement, I would suggest replacing often inhabited by dinosaur-like monsters with a separate sentence dedicated to non-humanoid life on Venus. I'll see if I can come up with something to do about the list of writers besides straight-up removing it. TompaDompa (talk) 17:17, 24 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm afraid I've been unable to think of anything to do to fix the list of writers besides just removing it. I toyed with the idea of saying something about when the different authors wrote their stories on Venus (e.g. the 1950s for Asimov), but couldn't come up with a way to make it work. This and the WP:OR Panthalassa comparison are the only outstanding issues that are deal-breakers for WP:Good article status to me. TompaDompa (talk) 04:32, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I'll ping User:Daranios (TIA!) to make a call on those issues, b/c I do disagree that they pose a problem. Daranios, to sum up, TD thinks we should remove mentions of author's names from the lead, and the term Panthalassa. For the latter, I recommend CTRL+F 'Panthalassa' so  you can see our discussion in circles. Third opinion to break the deadlock is much needed :) <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here  08:01, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I don't have a strong opinion on either point. If I had to decide, I would leave in the sentence listing the authors in the lead. I would remove the link to Panthalassa following 's argument here. That was a superocean, but not an example of a "planet-wide" ocean to the point that there are only a few islands. That article is also relatively specific to Earth and that period, etc., so not that helpful to envisioning such a setting in general. However, I would also be somewhat sad to see the term panthalassa removed from the article, as it seems to appear in a number of secondary sources. Linking to Ocean world is undisputed. So would there be a compromised possible along the lines "Others envisioned Venus as a panthalassic planet, being entirely covered by (an?) ocean with perhaps a few islands."? Daranios (talk) 07:35, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @Daranios I am fine with such a rewrite, although isn't my currnet wording: "(resembling Earth's Panthalassa)", at the same level as "a panthalassic planet"? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 08:31, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Well, "panthalassic planet" is one of the listed synonyms for the general concept of "Ocean world", while Earth's Panthalassa, is the one specific superocean in Earth's history. I think it would be fair to draw that parallel to Panthalassa - the definition of ocean world, as has mentioned somewhere, I think, does include a world like ours with significant land but even more water area. But it's not a perfect fit to the image I get from Venus in fiction. At the time of Panthalassa there was Pangea, which seems more or less the same land area as we have now, quite a bit more than "a few islands". As I said, it's not a strong opinion. Daranios (talk) 10:43, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. Let's see what TD thinks; I am fine with mellowing it down but like you, I think it would be good to preserve the term and a link to the concept, along the lines: the term is mentioned in sources, why can't we do this too? <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:48, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks, . Using "panthalassic" (in other words, "all-oceanic" but with Greek morphemes) as an adjective is a good idea for a compromise. I'll implement that. As for the authors, I'll clarify that I don't mind mentioning/linking them in the WP:LEAD per se, but I don't think the way it's currently done works. I'll try tinkering with it to see if I can come up with something. TompaDompa (talk) 20:20, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I gave it a shot. Take a look and tell me what you think (or, you know, revert or edit further). TompaDompa (talk) 21:02, 8 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @TompaDompa Looks good, and if the panthalassic planet redirects to Ocean world rather than Panthalassa, that's arguably for the better too. Thank you for your help! <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:50, 9 August 2022 (UTC)

Status query
TompaDompa, Piotrus, where does this review stand? It has been open for three months, and as best I can tell, the issues raised at that time are still being dealt with. If there's so much that needs to be done, the suggestion that this was nominated prematurely would seem to have merit. If this cannot be wrapped up in the next week or so, perhaps it should be closed. It can always be nominated again once all the issues have been dealt with, whenever that turns out to be. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:42, 27 April 2022 (UTC)


 * I am working on this, but I know, super slowly. If this is an issue, I don't mind if this is failed and I'll renom this once I am done addressing the issues, which I do intend to do in the foreseeable future. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 09:44, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

I should perhaps also clarify that yes, I am monitoring this page. I plan to go over the article in its entirety again once all my previous comments have been addressed, but I'll respond to a few things now as well: , do you think you can share the entry from The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy that you received from WP:RX with me? It would be helpful in reviewing this article. TompaDompa (talk) 21:35, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Using the image in the WP:LEAD as an example of a pulp story featuring Venus is perfectly acceptable, and the caption should in that case note that Venus appeared in many such stories (SFE says "The early sf pulps made abundant use of Venusian scenarios.", so that's hardly WP:OR). The image placement is probably something we should revisit once the review is further along.
 * All the information in the sentence Early astronomers [...] a desert. is verified by the other sources, so citing Launius and Taylor & Grinspoon is superfluous (and the article should really be based on sources on Venus in fiction, not scientific articles on Venus itself),
 * The stuff about Arrhenius' speculations is still way excessive and needs to be condensed. Now that this source is cited, the references to Launius and Taylor & Grinspoon should be removed (again, base the article on sources on Venus in fiction rather than on scientific articles on Venus) and the current content rewritten based on that source to be a significantly briefer summary of Arrhenius' speculations and more focus on the impact on fictional depictions of Venus.
 * I don't think the image of the ruins in the jungle is appropriate. My understanding from the sources is that this would not be a typical representation of Venus in these works of fiction—that is to say, I don't get the impression that one would expect a work that depicts Venus as being covered in jungle to have ruins in that jungle (especially not as a prominent feature). It would seem to give the reader an incorrect impression of how Venus was depicted in these works. It might be possible to find an appropriate image with a jungle or swamp and dinosaurs or other prehistoric creatures as this is per the sources a fairly common representation of Venus, but if we can't find one the current image needs to go even if that means that the section doesn't have any images.
 * The sources that use the term panthalassa do not refer to the specific historical superocean that surrounded the supercontinent Pangaea, thus covering roughly 70% of Earth's surface. They use the term in the generic sense to refer to a planet-wide ocean, in this case one that covers the entire surface of Venus. This is made clear by this source and this source which both use the term, and the concept is also referred to without using the term in these sources: The term panthalassa (lowercase p, as opposed to Panthalassa) is rather incidental here and we can simply explain what it means without using the term itself.
 * I know Rob Maslen is an academic, but WP:SPS says Self-published expert sources may be considered reliable when produced by an established subject-matter expert, whose work in the relevant field has previously been published by reliable, independent publications., and I don't know that those criteria are met here? Maslen's area of expertise is fantasy, no? It's better not to cite a questionable source when we have definitely-reliable sources available. Venus being mostly oceanic in Last and First Men, which seems to be the main point here (the stuff about Last and First Men here is a bit overly detailed anyway), is verified by Stableford.


 * @TompaDompa The good news is that yes, I have the Greenwood pdf on this computer, so if you send me an email I'll reply with the attachment. The slightly less good news is that I don't fully agree with regarding the content. In order:
 * LEAD: I am honestly not sure what you mean, i.e. if any action is required?
 * Regarding Launius and Taylor & Grinspoon, I don't like removing sources; even if they are redundant, they may be easier for some readers to access than the others. I don't think we've reached the point of WP:CITEBOMB, so I'd prefer to let those refs remain. In addition, having several sources for a claim ensures we are representing a more mainstream and DUE view, so I think it is actually a best practice to cite more than one source for a fact.
 * Arrhenius content has been pruneda already and I think what remains is relevant. If you really think it needs to be pruned further, please WP:BEBOLD and prune it more - I honestly don't know what to cut. WP:NOTPAPER, the article is not overly long, I really think we can leave it be.
 * I agree the image of dinesources in the jungle would be superior, but I don't think the image of ruins is confusing. We can clarify it in caption, which I just did: Artist's impression of ruins in an alien jungle, the latter a common background in many early stories of adventure on Venus. How's that?
 * the word panthalassa is not something most readers will be familiar with and a wikilink sees helpful for the context; I don't think the readers will be confused by thinking the link implies that Venus had the very same historical entity, just like linking to a jungle, which discusses Earth jungles, doesn't imply Venusian jungles are identical, etc.
 * re: Rob Maslen. If we look at this from an interdisciplinary perspective, just one level up, if he published about fantasy, then the step up to "expert in speculative fiction" is really not that big. If you think all the content is verified with other sources (which if they aren't added to the right sentences, please BEBOLD and add, given you have recently verified them, I assume), than just like with Taylor & Grinspoon, I am not opposed to them being removed but for redundancy sake my preference is to keep all sources. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 10:12, 6 June 2022 (UTC)

I have sent you an email. WP:RX pointed me to this link to The Greenwood Encyclopedia of Science Fiction and Fantasy on the Internet Archive which you may find useful for other articles and sent me the "Venus and Venusians" entry from Gary Westfahl's Science Fiction Literature through History: An Encyclopedia. I'll also note that The Visual Encyclopedia of Science Fiction (link on the Internet Archive) has some information that may be relevant on pages 81, 92, 93, 95, 128, and 163 (perhaps others as well, I only took a quick look). TompaDompa (talk) 12:47, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

Summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * The prose could use some additional copyediting, but is now within acceptable limits.
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * The article goes into a bit much detail about related topics (mainly the history of planetary science relating to Venus) at times, but after the copyediting that has been done I find it to be within acceptable bounds. It is likewise a bit heavy on examples without details, but not disqualifyingly so.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * All images are public domain, CC BY-SA 3.0, or CC BY-SA 4.0 (the last one being fine for media but not for text per WP:CFAQ).
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I think this was nominated prematurely. There is much to be done before this can be listed as a WP:Good article. Update: This work has now been done.
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * All images are public domain, CC BY-SA 3.0, or CC BY-SA 4.0 (the last one being fine for media but not for text per WP:CFAQ).
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I think this was nominated prematurely. There is much to be done before this can be listed as a WP:Good article. Update: This work has now been done.
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I think this was nominated prematurely. There is much to be done before this can be listed as a WP:Good article. Update: This work has now been done.

TompaDompa (talk) 21:54, 27 January 2022 (UTC)


 * @TompaDompa My apologies for the delay, I just finished the last GAR I had before this, and I'll start engaging with this article now. Thank you for holding this so long. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:13, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
 * Note: I am working through the above list, albeit slowly. Too many other things have been coming up, both on and off wiki. But I intend to continue. <sub style="border:1px solid #228B22;padding:1px;">Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 11:19, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
 * The article now meets all the WP:Good article criteria. Well done! TompaDompa (talk) 17:56, 9 August 2022 (UTC)